I enjoy reading everyones poems but this one was very noticeable.I liked it but u repeated alot of things.Dont worry i do it too.And it does sound like u've been hurt and im sorry.To me the worse thing possible is to be hurt by someone u love.Good job!
The last stanza was the best in this poem. It made it sound more like a poem than a story, and it captured the moment the best. Don't get me wrong but you seemed influenced by the song "scars" by papa roach when you said "tear out my heart, and rip it to shreds" Anyways a little revision would make it much better so consider that because it would sound much better. Good try! Alyssa