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    dots Submission Name: Love's Cursedots
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    Author: Lauralye
    Elite Ratio:    2.09 - 1/2/2
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 157
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsLove's Cursedots
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    Hear the raven’s midnight cry,
    When the moonlight finds your eye,
    For taking something not your own
    Hath caused your soul to turn to stone.

    Upon the night the moon is full,
    A thousand demons steal your soul,
    Cast upon you, your true light,
    A heart that is as black as night.

    In your dreams the raven waits,
    To show your soul a terror’s fate,
    Demons haunt your midnight sleep
    Until you think of me and weep.

    With your heart full of false love,
    Pierce the heart of one white dove,
    Chant three times the name you need,
    Your broken heart forever bleeds.

    Evermore, your heart will break,
    In your dreams your soul will ache,
    For one never yours, will never be,
    But that forevermore belongs to me.





    Submitted on 2006-01-21 15:05:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello, Welcome, and Wow! This is really well done, a great beat and althought the meter is not perfectly in form, it does not hurt its reading. A powerful message, Cursed from Stealing Love! Just who might the Raven be working for, another Black figure from Eternity's dark realm, perhaps the Devil himself?
    i believe most lines are seven or eight steps, but this is so great a thought it captivates you whae its read.
    You'll be welcomed greatly here, I hope.
    Hint; the key to being read is locked to when you post, if you post when a lot of younger writers are in, they usually stick to not so poetic writes, vice versa with older styles. That has been my experience anyway.
    Welcome once again
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]



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