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    dots Submission Name: The Ironydots

    Author: MC-Chillz
    ASL Info:    18/M/KS
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 36/35/6
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 632
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Just writin down what I'm feeling at the time...Read this shyt with a beat, and it makes it sound a lot better...let me know what you think~

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    dotsThe Ironydots

    Got in a fight yesterday,
    Fight me again...I won't play,
    Went to sleep that night,
    Wishin' I won the fight,
    Woke up achin,
    I'm wakin to the smell of bacon,
    I'm shaken,
    Must be mistaken,
    Maybe she tryin' to be sympathetic,
    Or maybe she realizes I'm just pathetic,
    This first verse,
    Tryin' not to curse,
    But I'm goin bazzerk,
    Lookin at the jerk,
    Who always gives me a smirk.
    Saw the dude downtown,
    I glanced over and noticed a frown,
    Seemed he was lurkin,
    Guess he was workin,
    Never knew so many people,
    People just like me, at the steeple,
    I said God, Why can't I write?
    I may be white, but my flowz is tiight.
    Interrupted by what he was sayin,
    By that dude with a gun that's sprayin,
    Best believe now I'm prayin,
    No way in hell am I stayin,
    I got the fuk outta there, walkin down the block,
    Crazy faggot had a glock,
    Started to run,
    Went to my car for my gun,
    Gun was gone and missing,
    So I went for the next best thing,
    Pulled out a fat sack of dank,
    Showed it to him and said "What do you think?"
    I guess the dude liked smokin'
    We was tokin' and by the end we were jokin'
    And that's,,, how the story goes,
    Outta my way....smokin these dros.

    Submitted on 2006-01-21 17:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      with or without a beat... its still so da da, dada, da da, dada... blah ablah blah blah blahblahblah- i wish ii caould say something nicer, but i think its too simple.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by bLiNdFAiTh | [ Reply to This ]
      haha lol almost shoud have expected the ending jkjk. this was pretty [censored] cool..but yeah it's a hell of a lot better with a beat...anyway I liked this one,killer flow.
    keep writin,
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      so the irony was the ending of the verse. u and this guy becoming friends towards the end. i think this one was ok. just like a laid back azz freestyle. not bad. welcome to elite
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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