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    dots Submission Name: Raindots
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    Author: OrionsStorm
    ASL Info:    18/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180/247/76
    Words: 489
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
    Total Views: 667
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3010



    Description:
       wrote this about a week ago...it's acoustic...think Black Balloon by Goo Goo Dolls


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    dotsRaindots
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    Grey outside,
    the sun is nowhere to be found
    Rain comes down,
    sprinkling the earth
    Everyone is inside
    All alone, he looks up,
    thinkin about his love
    He wonders,
    will he ever see her?
    He's seeing her face
    everywhere he goes
    he just can't let her go

    He sees her best in the rain
    When the skies are grey
    and it's one of those days
    His heart burns with this fire
    the very thought of her
    takes him so much higher
    He sees her best in the rain
    where she rids him of his pain

    It's been so long
    since he's heard her voice
    and he wonders
    has she forgotten me?
    Where are you now?
    and it's one of those rainy days,
    he thinks about her again,
    wishing she could be with him

    He sees her best in the rain
    When the skies are grey
    and it's one of those days
    His heart burns with this fire
    the very thought of her
    takes him so much higher
    He sees her best in the rain
    where she rids him of his pain

    when she's back,
    she's gone from him
    he understands but he wonders
    could it ever be as real
    as it was before?
    He still loves her then,
    can she not see?
    he tries to tell her,
    and again it is raining,
    the sky grey

    He sees her best in the rain
    When the skies are grey
    and it's one of those days
    His heart burns with this fire
    the very thought of her
    takes him so much higher
    He sees her best in the rain
    where she rids him of his pain

    Alone again,
    he screams to no one
    How could she do this to me?
    What fun does she get from this?
    and he does not understand,
    not yet...
    He screams at her,
    calling her the worst
    his bitterness clouding his love,
    why? god why....
    he yells to the world, to no one

    He sees her best in the rain
    When the skies are grey
    and it's one of those days
    His heart burns with this fire
    the very thought of her
    takes him so much higher
    He sees her best in the rain
    where she rids him of his pain

    months pass,
    he realizes he will never have her,
    not his path, and not hers,
    he protects her the best he can,
    as brother and sister they are,
    and is he happy?
    as long as she smiles,
    he will always be happy

    He sees her best in the rain
    When the skies are grey
    and it's one of those days
    His heart burns with this fire
    the very thought of her
    takes him so much higher
    He sees her best in the rain
    where she rids him of his pain







    Submitted on 2006-01-21 18:30:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Awesome song. Thats exactly how I feel. Anyway, tears are dropping on my side right now. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Sarah J | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow man, this is such an awesome song! Kinda long...but omg, it could totally work, haha.

    It was very emotional...and i bet you wrote this from some sort of experiance...missing someone so much =p But then again...you could turn these lyrics around and have a girl missing her man, lol. They juss work like that =p

    Well I can't think of much more to say...but your writing skills have defenitly improved since I've been gone! Like wow! High five man =p

    ttyl!
    ~Kriss

    (p.s. it's good to be back )
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Storm, what's up? this is very good. I enjoyed it a lot. It was kinda tragic in it's own way, if you know what I mean, lol. It was very well written, too and had a great flow. Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really like this song Bro. Verry well writen, verry emotional. One of your best. (It made me cry if that tells you anything about how good it was) Definatley adding it to my faves. Great write. You did a fabulouse job it was amazingly writen. Are you ever gonna put it to music and sing it? Great write.

    Love ya,

    Sarah

    P.S. I'm sorry Storm.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i liked it it was well written and had a great flow i liked the line that says he sees her best in the rain keep it up and good job i am going to add it to my faves
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by EV2884 | [ Reply to This ]


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