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    dots Submission Name: Soilder Alone Verse 1dots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 820
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsSoilder Alone Verse 1dots
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    Carrying my lyrical assualt rifle the last man standing
    Blood plattered on my face combatants so comanding
    Comanding me 2 preform in unhumainly ways
    Nightmares of lead filled brains to my undisired dismay
    Uncontrolable killing rappers in a hip hop bramch alone
    On top of the game label me the lyrical Al Caboine
    Busting knee caps with holotips spittin lyrics like bullets
    Put my hand down your throat grab your spine and pull it
    Let the Mortal Combat voice label it a fatality
    Come 2 your hood and lower the rate of mortality
    This might not be mtv program but this world is a reality
    Looks like im walking the fine line between genus and insanity
    And when the blood shed is over tears fall down my face
    Lookin in the miror thinkin what a discrace
    Nightmares keep me awake then the next day i do it all again
    Words spraying like a lyrical mac 10
    This is the life of a soilder alone in this world
    When i go back all i have waiting for me is my girl

    Chorus
    Soilder sent 2 war but they not sent back breathin
    Never again will they see the change of the season
    Yet this soilder still stands saved by divine intervention
    Still my awars for valory and braveness go unmentioned




    Submitted on 2006-01-21 20:48:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i've been meaning to ask this before i went on vacation..how long have u been rapping? lol Anyways this was tight. I can't wait to read the second verse which should be soon right?

    Danni aka DePoetry
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      [censored] man, this is crazy, I"m still workin on my choruses and hooks...they still suck...but you did good man, I like that [censored] about MTV..
    | Posted on 2006-02-18 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      ill [censored] chaz. this was probably the best i've ever heard u spit before. look at lil chaz thinking he a beast or something. yeah i type pretty bad too dawg don't sweat it. this one is bout to go on my fave list. peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      Carrying my lyrical assualt rifle the last man standing
    Blood plattered on my face combatants so comanding

    This might not be mtv program but this world is a reality
    Looks like im walking the fine line between genus and insanity

    damn dawg. u still spell like a [censored]ign 3 year old. it's good though. u had a few good metaphors although i woulda tried to make this one flow better. u need to work on ur flow cuz u can spit some hot [censored] and still sound awful if ur flow is terrible. this is gonna be another fave though. just work on ur style
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good Chaz! I'm the first to comment, yeay! You delivered with this one with your rough and bold in your face manner. I liked the flow of this. I liked the way you wrote the whole thing! The part about pulling the spine out was a trip! Then the part about MTV, wow! You brought it with this one. There were some typos, but that did not kill the flow or ruin this. Another fav to my list. Great job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-21 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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