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    dots Submission Name: The Notedots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    17/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 85/76/31
    Words: 353
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 190
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    dotsThe Notedots
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    Everyday she wrote another word
    Slashing it into the rockface
    Screaming against the shifting currents
    Erosion biting at her form
    Teeth clenched at the promise of pain
    Such frantic thoughts in desperation
    Her pathetic cries of attention
    Were but a whisper in the wind
    An attempt to sew her wings back on
    Needle and thread desecration
    A stinging entrance, guilty exit
    Painful defiance of her fate
    Despite her effort, they failed her still
    Crashing painfully on the ground
    Creases and cracks adorning the
    Once holiest of her altars
    A peaceful haven now left in flames
    Stained by the colour of her guilt
    Trembling as the nightmares finally end
    Cradled by the warming blackness
    Silence all too deafening to bear
    Mouth wide open, screaming nothing

    Light glimmers upon her words
    Scrawled out so obsessively
    Such reflection of torment
    Spilled across inner anguish
    The floor, walls, and the ceiling
    Covered in these sentences
    Recording her sanity
    As it slipped from her fingers
    This place was her lifelong work
    Leaving less of her behind
    A glimmer of hope too dim
    To notice when you're blinded by scars
    No smiles this time, no cheer
    Denial becomes so clear
    Surrounded by the feathers
    Haphazardly sewed back on
    Piercing deep into her back
    Tearing tender veins open
    Every memory exits
    Leaving an empty shell

    Outside of this ruined altar
    Where her glowing prayers had collapsed
    Life flourishes without her thoughts
    The sun beams above, offering light
    That had never made it through the cracks
    To the place where she had locked herself in
    Without inhibition, hope shall grow
    Right behind her back, she didn't know
    Serenity and peace unconfined
    A perfect blue sky without one cloud
    All her hopes, her dreams, her cries aloud
    The answer was just outside the door
    Peaceful chirpings of a bird is heard
    Existance unaffected by death

    Pillars and foundation collapse
    Like glass her name shatters, and slips
    Amongst the countless ranks, nameless
    Just dust blowing in the wind
    Her words are just a memory
    Every phrase becomes sand and fades
    One final word remains intact...

    "Goodbye"






    Submitted on 2006-01-22 09:17:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      welcome another canadian and thanx for the comments on poets thanx for suggestion i left it that way as eternities whisper is the poem to follow one day just havent thought about writing it maybe i will now thanx for the idea
    Yor post was great i enjoyed it to the end made me think and feel alot of things
    great write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]



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