Some suggestions for the rhythm (this poem deserves to be perfect). In the first stanza, last line "You've still given me choice" fits better to the beat. The second stanza, first line, remove "the". Third stanza, second line, "shall I, too, remain the same...". Last stanza, "So praise to You today for helping pull me through" improves rhythm. Just trying to help.
This piece touched my heart and shook my entire being. What I admire most about this piece is that you didn't really go so deep into the trivial differences between numerous religions. I'm not a Christian, but I believe in God, and in times of need, the greatest athiest does so too. You are a wonderful inspiration, and I think the title of this deserves capitol letters.
This was so good that it reads almost like lyrics...direct from the heart with a pleasing sound to the ear and an easy roll from the tounge. It's nice to see some more religious pieces here. They bring a certain inspired joy to the reader. God's peace jan
Beautiful Absolutely Beautiful This write sums up the Love your speaking of perfectly My Friend you captured my Heart with this one And I Thank God for giving you the words you shared with us God Bless Your Friend Ron
this poem i can feel you expressions for one who should know u very well to seem to know u as well as i must, but you express your feeling of faith and the desires you have this poem will go far! good work!
I can feel your faith in God is very strong. It is full of expression and emotions .It appears you have done something wrong and regret it. It helps to get everything out in a poem and it really eases the mind.