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    dots Submission Name: Play Balldots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsPlay Balldots
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    They tell me that in the beginning God created a baseball game.
    He bulldozed a pasture and made a diamond, set up the fence, baselines and backstop.
    From the dust he picked the teams and set the rules of play.
    Then he went up to the stands and took a seat from which to keep score

    It seems to me to be a silly game.
    So I sit in right field watching the action.
    When it is my turn at bat, don't expect me to swing.
    I won't run or take a walk, so call me out on strikes
    I am too busy reading the testaments that are scribbled on the grass and inscribed on the tablets of dandelions.




    Submitted on 2006-01-22 12:37:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Some of us really do look at baseball religiously so the two can be put hand in hand. I liked this poem because it made me think of one of my loves in life, baseball. To appreciate it from a distance is great! Once you fall in love with baseball you never love that no matter how old you get. Keep up the good work.

    Eddie(ERA)
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by ERA | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really cool. I am a baseball fan and reading about religions is a huge hobby for me, so naturally, I love this! The message of how you do not subscribe to two opposing teams in this life and how you are too busy reading on how to be a better person instead of fight is wonderful. Greak work!

    IK
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG...this describes my son last year in little league to a tee! He'd rather look at nature that watch the game and what's going on.

    I like that this holds an underlying moral:
    don't get so caught up in the game that you forget to read the instructions.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, this is cool, Chrystine. it puts stupid ball games in perspective (at least for me). guys will always think sports are better than chocolate (and even sex sometimes). some of them anyway. boys are stupid. but your poem is fantastic!
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooohh, I like this! What a neat little idea, with the creation starting your game theme off nicely.

    The first line of the second stanza...maybe a little long for comfort, would you consider sittling in right field watching the "silly action" or something else to show your apathy of modern life?

    That's my only little pick, applause from me, I love it, and the finish is superb!

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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