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    dots Submission Name: Introducing MC-Chillzdots
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    Author: MC-Chillz
    ASL Info:    18/M/KS
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 36/35/6
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 720
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1208



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       Yo main! I wuz just listening to the 8-mile freestyle battle beat. I could flow these words so nicely. Let me know what you think~


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    dotsIntroducing MC-Chillzdots
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    Listenin', to the 8 mile track,
    Tryin' to get,,my rhymes back,
    Can't figure out what goes, on this track.
    Hit me back, let me know what I lack,
    When writin' this down, all I see is black.
    Glancin' to my left, and I see his mac,
    Lookin' at me crazy,, a little wack.

    Keepin' my distance, not gettin' near,
    Listen to this shyt I'm puttin' in your ear,
    It's OK kids, have no fear,
    The one and only Chillz is here.

    Yo - wut up, it's my premier,
    Just sit back and don't interfere,
    What I'm sayin', is very clear.
    Let me get my mind in gear.

    I may be new, but I'm going to ascend,
    Let me go, let me transcend.
    I aint your friend, we don't mend. Comprehend?
    I'm the,dragon slayer,say a prayer,
    gotz,more power than the mayor.

    Test me! Say I'm unskilled,
    That kinda shyt will get you killed,
    Cuttin' you up's what gets me fulfilled.
    Do it all, while I'm relaxed and chilled.








    Submitted on 2006-01-22 14:22:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn dude, forreal you definitely got some skills. it don't matter how long the lines are or [censored], it's how u vent it out that matters. Don't worry bout none of the rhyme schemes either, they're just bull[censored]. Peace n Love;-)

    ~*AnGeL*~
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by missing_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      hum this is wierd. if u try and ryhm 7 times try and stick with it. Try to keep the same beat of words. but I guess its cool. how bout next time try it and see if you can do it. Its hard but give it a shot. It might take some time but see if you can do it, and 7 time rymes are hard just try 4 lines that ryme.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a pretty good introduction. yeah u might wanna try and stick with a flow for each stanza at least. it'll make it more coherent. i liked this though. i think u were a lil redundant in the first stanza. u used "track" twice. i think u shoulda used another word. tell me when u have an idea for the collabo
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty cool the only thing is maybe try to make your lines themselves a little longer and make the entire thing longer-you get a person into the beat and then it kinda drops...keep people in that trance that you're getting good at building up...this was an okay write thought.
    peace and keep writin'.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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