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    dots Submission Name: Cursed From Birthdots
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    Author: DrunkOnShadows
    ASL Info:    16/F/Ont
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 66/84/49
    Words: 434
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 120
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2878



    Description:
       A poem about my physical disability. I know the flow is nearly non-existant, but the message is what's important. Don't take for granted all the things your able to do, no matter how insignificant they might seem.


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    Cursed from birth was she
    The moment her fragile body was expelled from her mother's wound
    And carried away at haste
    To be examined and diagnosed
    While the mother cried for her child
    And she cried back

    But every gasp between cries
    Caused her excrusiating pain
    Her bones were breaking
    Her tiny muscles aching
    She desperately needed her mother
    But the doctors wouldn't allow it

    After placing her in a nurse's care
    The doctor spoke to her mother
    And the mother wept for her child
    Cursing this burden that was bestowed upon them
    Asking the world "why?"
    Even though the mother knew there was no answer

    The mother learned that the diagnosis was not good
    That she, her daughter, might not make it through the night
    She just was not strong enough
    Couldn't grasp tight enough onto life to hang on
    But the mother was soon to find something out
    That doctors aren't always right

    She survived that night
    And many more after
    She grew, but not to her satisfaction
    She survived, but not to her liking
    She lived, and breathed, and spoke, and thought
    But anything physical, she was incapable of

    Now she's a teenager
    Fighting to survive in the world around her
    Not physically, but emotionally
    For the world is a cruel and cold place
    She's no longer sick and fragile
    She's headstrong, but losing her will to live

    Everything in this world reminds her
    Reminds her of how abnormal she really is
    She's missing out on so much
    This girl has never been able to walk
    And never will be able to in the future
    For her entire life, she will be confined to a wheelchair

    People around her make her sick
    Her friends, her family, all of society
    They take for granted all the simple things
    Like being able to stand on their own two feet
    When she's confined to the same four wheels
    They don't understand how lucky they truly are

    That girl beat the odds
    And has survived to write this poem
    Although, sometimes she wishes the odds had beat her
    And she had succumbed to death the first night of her life
    Then she wouldn't have known what she was missing out on
    She wouldn't have known how her life should've been

    She's alive today
    And will survive as long as her will will let her
    But untill the day she breaks and dies
    She shares her life with other people
    Showing them how lucky they are
    Showing them, no matter what, your life can always be worse




    Submitted on 2006-01-22 15:21:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a great poem.
    Your right, we dont know how much we have till we loose it. You can look around & see people that just take everything they have & look at it as nothing...amazing isnt it? its as if we were blind.
    I dont think that you are unlucky at all, you see life through different eyes.
    You are a true survivor. You see life as a new day, a blessing, everything you can do is special because you might not be able to, but you can.
    I would never say you were cursed. Sure, it is easy for me to say because I can walk, but look at everything you have overcome. Everything you can look back on, you are here now writting to us telling us that we need to charish what we have. Your voice is so much stronger then those around you. Thank you for this, it needed to be written.
    take care & keep fighting, you are an inspiration.
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      I *would* split that line up, but I have this thing about having even stanzas. If all my stanzas aren't the same amount of lines, it bugs me.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by DrunkOnShadows | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd try to avpid using a word twice in a row to start a line,

    'Her bones were breaking
    Her tiny muscles aching'

    It just makes it sound better really.

    I suggest you slit up this line, 'The moment her fragile body was expelled from her mother's wound' into two parts, e.g.

    'The moment her fragile body,
    Was expelled from her mothers wound'

    Talking about this line it was interesting how you refered it to 'wound'. It was cool!
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Seele | [ Reply to This ]



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