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    dots Submission Name: heres what i have to saydots

    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsheres what i have to saydots

    why should i care anymore
    i stand here all alone, staring at the shoreline
    the beat of waves matches my heart
    and memories of years spent apart
    wash them self ashore it seems.

    its hard to believe you'll be leaving here soon
    the pain and the lies are all behind us
    we have learned to be friends again
    but it simply doesn't bother me as before.

    everything i stare at seems a distant memory
    the graduations soon, goodbye is hard for me
    all i want is what i can strive to be
    and i finally got it, you wont be standing here beside me.

    i think its time i opened up completely
    maybe my deep dark secrets wont kill me
    my habits aren't as bad anymore
    my lifes finally got something to look forward for.

    so long to the love i thought i needed
    hello to the rest of my life
    tonight isn't different from before
    i smile as the sunsets on the new days of my life.

    Submitted on 2006-01-22 16:50:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i've njoid the write, and lovd yr description-especially yr ending note- it really was a gr8 line i cud relate to the poem with the last line- the soul of yr potry piece, i b'live.
    come to my pge and comment..
    keep writin
    | Posted on 2006-02-15 00:00:00 | by wasif | [ Reply to This ]
      The title was a bit misleading. But, this is a good kind of surprise. The use of metaphor was effective, but perhaps you could build more upon it. The emotion and relief is very honest in this poem. I can feel the happiness of being able to move on and live again.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey i really like this poem.I think its cool how you compared the beat of your heart to waves in the ocean.I think this is a good poem.Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]

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