i've njoid the write, and lovd yr description-especially yr ending note- it really was a gr8 line i cud relate to the poem with the last line- the soul of yr potry piece, i b'live. come to my pge and comment.. keep writin wasif
The title was a bit misleading. But, this is a good kind of surprise. The use of metaphor was effective, but perhaps you could build more upon it. The emotion and relief is very honest in this poem. I can feel the happiness of being able to move on and live again.