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    dots Submission Name: A Mans Right To Crydots
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    Author: PoeticDarkness
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 9/13/4
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I just think it's sad that men are frowned upon by small minded people when they cry.


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    dotsA Mans Right To Crydots
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    The crying man, a sight now rare,
    Doesn't mean that they can't care,
    Means they are strong and have no fear,
    An illusion that's lost if they shed a tear.

    Women cry and it makes them weak,
    Men cry and they are just a freak,
    How sad this world has inspired such views,
    That a man can't cry no matter what the news.

    Who passed these views that men can't cry?
    Who dared to state and impose this lie?
    Whoever spoke this unwritten rule,
    Should be condemned as a stupid fool.

    Men have emotions that they shouldn't hide,
    They shouldn't feel so wrong when they've cried.
    So men release your cautions and your woes,
    Let go those tears and let loose your repose.





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      i really liked this...it reminds me of the first time i ever saw my father cry...and of course, in never really seeing him cry before, it made me want to cry with him. personally i think it's awesome when a man cries...it shows courage. i mean, its always taught that the man should be the strong one bla bla bla...it's just a good thing i dont have any sons because i would turn them into pusses lol.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO
    An encore please my good man ( in english accent)
    Your piece was sophisticated as hell but flowed like a love song by marvin gaye or al green. I liked it alot and then the fact that your poem mimiced my favorite bible verse made it even more special.
    I once wrote two page based on these two words, the shortest verse in the bible.
    "Jesus wept"
    The greatest of all men cried, the strongest of all men felt pained enough to shed tears, the most innocent, and most righteuos man ever had reason to cry. we could talk all day bout why he cried but no let us focus on that he cried, that we as weaker, and completey inferior men can not expect ourselves to not be cabable of crying. A real man strives to be like Jesus, and therefore will cry.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Atrip187 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked both the structure of the poem and the point that you successfully got accross. I don't understand why it isn't proper for men to cry either. Supposedly it makes men look week, but i don't buy that. The call for men to release their emotions at the end of the poem was excellent. So many problems occur because men keep their emotions locked inside until the explode and things like sucide occur.
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Linksquest | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this was interesting. It reminded me of my own "Tears" but the topic isn't uncommon. Before I used to find that men were considered weak if they cried, but throughout the years I've realised that's wrong. I'm not sure if my own perspective has taken over my judgement but I feel that only in a child's eyes are men today looked down on for shedding tears.

    Anyway, down to the poem. It's good to see you've gotten what you meant into a rhyme scheme without much struggle. Still, the rhythm is a bit shaky in places. My suggestion is to maybe make the lines longer, with more syllables you know. You won't have to alter the entire piece because it's rhyming couplets but maybe some couplets here and there could do with an additional syllabe or two.

    Fair read,

    DeepDreamer2008
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
      very good poem.. everything went very well together altho on line 8 I would take out "what" so it reads "That a man can't cry no matter the news" I think it makes it flow better. IMO :) very good write thank you for sharing
    | Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by rosered | [ Reply to This ]



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