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Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
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This is for all my HOMIES back HOME. And for the rest, just enjoy it, diss it, or comment on it. Looking for a title, suggestions appreciated.


As I attempt to fall asleep,
I try to remember a time when I last felt grief so deep,
A feeling which seems no other situation can duplicate
Add more problems, it won't further complicate;
Grief I have to its highest degree,
Don't even have to buy it- it comes for free;
Can't think of a reason why I'm so sad,
Maybe it's just because there's no one around to make me glad,
Maybe it's just because I'm so far away from home
Wondering when I'll go back as unknown turfs I roam.
Maybe it's because my taste in life is so bland
That it's hard to make people understand
How I live in a world of shadow,
Looking for a door to escape through, or even a small window.

Submitted on 2006-01-22 20:21:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this alot. the title kinda bites but oh well. i hope to read more by you soon. keep up the great work. i know a lot of people will be able to relate.
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Rock on man, I rely like this. You are a well spoken individual, and you express yourself thoroughly in this piece. My avorite part is your ending, I know the feeling of seeking an excape whether it be large or small. Keep up the good work my man, and hopefully you make it home one day. My title suggestion "Seekng a light in my shadows"
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by ThisIsMyLfe | [ Reply to This ]

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