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Did you really think that?

Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 126
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Not much to say, the poem says it all. So close, and yet so far...

Did you really think that?

Did you really think that I love you?
Did you really think that I long for you?
Did you really think that I want you?
Yes, I have loved you all this time,
Longing to be with someone like you, so divine
And I want you only as mine.
Did you really think that I cannot live without you?
Did you really think that I only concentrate on you?
Did you really think that I am just another one of them after you?
Yes, I'm actually dying here without your presence;
Yes, my attention is directed towards
The very space you occupy and everything you do;
But no, I am not like anyone else,
For I am truly in love with you.

Submitted on 2006-01-22 20:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ah a nice love poem. Why do we fall in love? Too painful if u ask me. Good write, flows nicely. Me likey.

| Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  This is easy to grasp...ask the question...give the answer. Like a recipe, this piece could use a little more UMMPHH! (flow) Overall, a nice piece of poetic expression.
| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Mr. Amateur | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree, this woud have been easier to read if it had more flow to it, but it still speaks volumes of emotion. I can definately relate to how you feel with this. I just hope you let whoever you are in love with know about it as soon as possible. Never and I mean NEVER wait to tell someone, it may just be too late if you do.
| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by ThisIsMyLfe | [ Reply to This ]
  great feeling...this one doesnt have to flow to stand out. you've got passion, and admiration. It could use a bit more flow, though just to make it easier to read.
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by xsweetangelkiss | [ Reply to This ]
  i love explains the exact situation i am in now...there is nothing to say but this is totally awesome..short and rite to the point...i love it..totally going to the favorites..good job..loves it...kk well keep this up...kelly
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]

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