This was great, covering a good easy to relate to subject while not falling into the cliché. Isn't that what makes things good? Well, I think it is, and so good job. The stark/shortness of the write works well. (I hope the word stark means bleak/emptyish)
Extinction does seem sweet sometimes, but you have to resist it any way. I love how you wrote this one. It contains basically just one thought, but very expressive and meaningful. The way you’re breaking the lines and forming the stanzas is quite strange, but that’s the one thing that keeps the reader following your thoughts. You have a really interesting approach. Just keep on writing, it’s a great way not to get extinguished.
Really great poem and it's not like all the other ones on this site (a great plus in my books) I loved the way you wrote this and hope you keep up the great work ^_^
This is a ggod write with a great use of words You wrote of the pesonal battle we all have with our very Lives There are decisions we make that will be wrong but when we we look deep at them we find the corrections that need to be made I enjoyed reading this Thank You for sharing this write
Please if you get a chance take a llook at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
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