CyberDynosaur

Author: nicelyJ Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 999 /519 /73 Words: 59

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CyberDynosaur

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on the brink of extin- guishing flame surrounded by a pit of black trying to stave back asphyxiation for the life of me, I can't sink deeper it's growing cold here and I'm growing sleepier as extinction seems evident, yet almost sweet

Submitted on 2006-01-23 09:12:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This was great, covering a good easy to relate to subject while not falling into the cliché. Isn't that what makes things good? Well, I think it is, and so good job. The stark/shortness of the write works well. (I hope the word stark means bleak/emptyish)

| Posted on 2007-02-19 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]

Extinction does seem sweet sometimes, but you have to resist it any way. I love how you wrote this one. It contains basically just one thought, but very expressive and meaningful. The way you’re breaking the lines and forming the stanzas is quite strange, but that’s the one thing that keeps the reader following your thoughts. You have a really interesting approach. Just keep on writing, it’s a great way not to get extinguished.

| Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]

Really great poem and it's not like all the other ones on this site (a great plus in my books) I loved the way you wrote this and hope you keep up the great work ^_^

| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

This is a ggod write with a great use of words You wrote of the pesonal battle we all have with our very Lives There are decisions we make that will be wrong but when we we look deep at them we find the corrections that need to be made I enjoyed reading this Thank You for sharing this write Please if you get a chance take a llook at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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