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ALONE


Author: star_on_fire22
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Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
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i wrote this on thursday in In School Suspension.. hope you all like it.. none of my work is any good.. but i sometimes get the urge to write.. pen and paper is my salvation from this cruel world.

~Ashley


ALONE



Drifting,
Usure of her place.
She's lost in a whirlpool of thoughts
Never knowing right from wrong.
Always messing everything up.
People stare,
they whisper behind her back
saying every cruel thing they can.
Daddy has gone and left her,
Mommy is too busy for her.
Unwanted
Unneeded
Usless in this world of super-humans.
She can't stand the way she is treated.
Why do they all have to be against her?
Everyone she ever loved, either left her, or forgot her.
How can she go on this way?
Drifting through life like a ghost,
She hides her emotions behind a veil.
No one will ever no what makes this girl tick.

No one will ever know Her At All.




Submitted on 2006-01-23 09:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this a lot and especially now during our teen years i know we will feel this a lot. i can totally relate to this and more. i love your work. keep it up. and keep your chin up and don't look down cause you could miss something good.
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tina
| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate to. I felt like this for the longest time till I found someone to take it all away. You arent a bad writer. You have potential. There were a few mispelled words but thats ok. Just keep at it, Ill keep reading!
| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
  I can totally relate with this poem. I am so sorry if your life is like this. My best advice to you is to find someone you are absolutely infatuated with and think about them all day. Regardless what people said about me, I knew that that one person could always make me feel like there was nothing wrong. Great write, the ryhming was a bit off, but other than that you honestly don't suck at writing so don't get discouraged. Keep it up!
Alyssa
| Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]


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