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    dots Submission Name: Blind in Paradisedots
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    Author: demonik_angel
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       it's my first poem so don't be too hard on me...:)


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    dotsBlind in Paradisedots
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    I can make out the sound of my heart
    loving you..or..
    hating everything about you..
    I'm trying to guess..how
    many tears have i lost?
    I still don't know my love..
    will you be there...when
    i'll be drinking the cup of my pain?

    You've left me blind in paradise..
    with no hopes
    no dreams..
    Nothing but an ice-cold soul
    wondering if it'll be able to love again...

    HoPiNg...




    Submitted on 2006-01-23 12:58:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think the emotion is great. The poem needs some structuring work, but overall it's a nice write. I can definitly relate to this poem and I strongly encourage you to keep writing! Nice work
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by MC-Chillz | [ Reply to This ]

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