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    dots Submission Name: haunteddots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       i wrote this in the middle of the night right aafter a really bvad dream about my mother beating my. i guess it was a flashback of the past but i'm not sure. child abuse sucks but a lot of us have to deal with it or see it everyday. please, if you can relate tell me i'm not the only one who was beaten as a child. maybe i can ease your pain as you ease mine...
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    tina


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    i'm haunted by my dreams.
    nothing is what it seems.
    i'm beaten by the world.
    i'm dizzy, my mind twirls.
    over and over again,
    don't let this be the end.
    stop hitting me 'fore i die.
    these tears i hate to cry.
    nowhere to run or turn.
    here comes another burn.
    please stop 'fore its too late.
    how can i ease your hate?
    why can't you walk away?
    tell me, what did i say?
    why do you beat me so?
    tell me what i don't know.
    i'm slowly dying now.
    please, don't ever ask how.
    its such an awful task,
    to answer questions you ask.
    i'm haunted by the past.
    finally, i'm dead at last.




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      your poem made me want to cry
    i cant stand those people who think that violence is the answer when in reality there the ones that cant stand up by themselves, it takes a strong person to write about this. your very strong for putting this up here and your ever stronger for surviving. <3ashley
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      i hate people that hit girls and beat them...this one pissed me off...in a good way though its a good write and the feelings are easily seen
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. My Dad used to abuse my mom when I was little, those images haunt me. Im sorry you had to go through that. This was a very good write. Emotional.
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
      I used to be abused when I was 8 and 9. Then I got into an abusive relationship. I really felt your pain and I am sorry for that. At least you didn't end up dead, but sometimes that is better than staying alive. Great job, Great write, and best of luck to you!
    Alyssa
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      Bless your heart & I want to just give you a big hug. I know about abuse and I'm sorry and I hope now you don't have to live with that.
    The abused always think in some way it's their fault and a lot of abusers were abused and continue the cyclical violence. It doesn't excuse it - it's just sad that some just do what was done to them.
    I believe that the positive comes in how you deal with people and how it actually will give you a strength in your life you may not otherwise have had.
    Here's a hug ~*~
    I thank you for sharing and the piece was well written and emotional.
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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