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    dots Submission Name: Stringing Pearlsdots

    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was originally just a description, but years of brainwashing in public school made me read into it. So, it can be a metaphor for life. I even gave into that metaphor near the end. *sigh* Stupid English curriculum. (lol)

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    dotsStringing Pearlsdots

    There she sits,
    A pair of scissors and needle,
    A spool of thread and jewels,
    Preparing herself.

    She cuts a length thrice over;
    It seems sufficient
    For the task at hand –
    A string of pearls.

    She picks one out,
    Smooth and round and white.
    But she is only
    Apprentice to the master.

    Questions begin to form,
    “Is it strong?
    Or too weak a string
    For the weight of pearls?”

    But it has begun,
    And cannot begin again.
    As a radiant serpent,
    It writhes and whispers.

    A thing of perfection.
    “But, perhaps, a ruby or two?
    A diamond or emerald?”
    The brilliant jewels she adds.

    She is nearing completion
    When the master intervenes.
    “No, no! I am not finished!
    I yet have jewels here!”

    The knot has been made,
    Imperfections laid bare.
    Pocked, marked, and gray pearls
    Are all she can see.

    Then around her neck
    The master lays it.
    The creator draws out
    All its perfections.

    In time she sees it,
    With glittering eyes,
    The necklace on her
    As perfection.

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      Mmmm, I enjoyed this. More of a story rich with imagery than a poem. I am a very visual person, so this made me smile. The metaphor for life is easily seen. Though I see something else that all this could represent. In Greek mythology there are the 3 Fates. Klotho, who combs the wool and spins the thread of life. Atropos weaves the thread into the fabric of one's actions. And Lachesis determines the length of the thread and thus the period of one's life. Just an interesting thought. Sorry, English classes have corrupted the innocence of my poetry reading/writing as well.

    Nicely done, by the way.

    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      The lengthy metaphor in this was not apparent until I read it twice... I'm just that intelligent. The meter of the poem was a bit strange at times, it felt kind of like it wanted to have meter in one stanza, but not in the next. A little confusing, but good nonetheless
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      You are a very talented writer. I love the society metaphor in this. We are all sheep waiting for someone to tell us how things should be done. The lucky ones are the ones who do the telling!

    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this should be catagorised as "society". It is a wonderful metaphor of life, and the reader can take it either positively or negatively. I like that, it's a choice the reader rarely gets to make.

    It could be positive in the idea that at first life is imperfect but when you look past the imperfections there is perfection to be found. On the other hand, this could be criticising society (I preferred this conclusion). You believe something, then superiority tells you otherwise, and with time you come to believe it as well.

    An intruiging read,

    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]

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