Every day is a new day
I regret every breath I take
Everything I do is a mistake
I hold my fate in my own hands
Every time I stand
My knees tremble
I feel so week and unable
these pills that I take are so post to keep me stable, and keep me in the right state of mind.
So much hates fills my soul,
I must be a complete fool to take another breath in this cruel world.
The number one rule,
Make sure you have no regrets
Because tomorrow you might not wake up.
i love this, because its the way that i am. this poem states the absolute truth. i love the way you tell it how it is, and your writing style is great. awesome rhyme scheme, discreet and subtle yet noticeably there. if that makes sense. ^_^
great write, and an even better read. =]
well this is one of your writings for sure, but you do have a few spelling errors like week, now come on i'm damn sure you know it is supposed to be weak, another one would be so post- it is spelled supposed but other then that the poem is short and fine. reading this i got an overall feeling of just saddness, and i can say that i have felt that everything that i have ever down was a regret but i got over that and things turned out ok so don't take things so hard and yes i know that is easier said then down but things will get better they always do. I do have to say that I love the last line of the poem
"Make sure you have no regrets Because tomorrow you might not wake up."
This is such a strong like to end a poem on and it is so very true.
The beginning of this was very depressed like but the end took on a new turn.It caught me off gaurd.I know I have a few poems like this,and I love this type of poetry.The flow is a bit off in some places.But,all in all you did a wonderful job.You painted the picture in my mind.Keep up the good work.
i used to feel like the begining of this.. all the time.. it is an awful way to feel... I liked this.. I think you did a nice job.. I only saw two spelling errors.. I think when you wrote so post it was meant to be supposed in a nother line you wrote hates i think that was meant to be hate. neway. i hate when ppl point out spelling errors.. lol... nice write.