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    dots Submission Name: Regretdots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Every day is a new day
    I regret every breath I take
    Everything I do is a mistake
    I hold my fate in my own hands
    Every time I stand
    My knees tremble
    I feel so week and unable
    these pills that I take are so post to keep me stable, and keep me in the right state of mind.
    So much hates fills my soul,
    I must be a complete fool to take another breath in this cruel world.
    The number one rule,
    Make sure you have no regrets
    Because tomorrow you might not wake up.

    Submitted on 2006-01-23 17:25:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this, because its the way that i am. this poem states the absolute truth. i love the way you tell it how it is, and your writing style is great. awesome rhyme scheme, discreet and subtle yet noticeably there. if that makes sense. ^_^
    great write, and an even better read. =]

    - Michi
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
      well this is one of your writings for sure, but you do have a few spelling errors like week, now come on i'm damn sure you know it is supposed to be weak, another one would be so post- it is spelled supposed but other then that the poem is short and fine. reading this i got an overall feeling of just saddness, and i can say that i have felt that everything that i have ever down was a regret but i got over that and things turned out ok so don't take things so hard and yes i know that is easier said then down but things will get better they always do. I do have to say that I love the last line of the poem

    "Make sure you have no regrets
    Because tomorrow you might not wake up."

    This is such a strong like to end a poem on and it is so very true.

    Get Happy

    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      The beginning of this was very depressed like but the end took on a new turn.It caught me off gaurd.I know I have a few poems like this,and I love this type of poetry.The flow is a bit off in some places.But,all in all you did a wonderful job.You painted the picture in my mind.Keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      i used to feel like the begining of this.. all the time.. it is an awful way to feel... I liked this.. I think you did a nice job.. I only saw two spelling errors.. I think when you wrote so post it was meant to be supposed in a nother line you wrote hates i think that was meant to be hate. neway. i hate when ppl point out spelling errors.. lol... nice write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]

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