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    dots Submission Name: Dreamerdots
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    Author: disturbed420
    ASL Info:    20/f/wpg
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 36/35/15
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Death
    Total Views: 818
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    Description:
       Just a scene from one of my dreams... it was intensely beautiful, and I just had to write something about it.


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    As the rain beat down, my heart sped up to a pace it had yet to reach.
    In my bones, I felt the tingle of being watched.
    I ignored the feeling, yet my heart beat faster.
    I turned around but my eyes caught nothing.
    I stood still and listened, to hear what was lurking so freely.
    In a distance I heard the frightening cry of a bird, screaming at the wind.
    As I turned to walk to the place I had yet to discover,
    a little boy sat near a tree; singing sweet songs ever so softly.
    Unknowingly I sat next to the boy, and started singing along to the song I had never heard, but knew all the lyrics to by heart.
    When I started to sing, the boy stopped to listen.
    He looked like he would scream.
    The voice that was singing was not my own, but a low, melodic one.
    The boy then began to sing along.
    I stopped to look up at the sky, as an eerie light shone, and hands from above reached out.
    I started singing once again, and the boy joined in.
    I stood up and started to walk, and felt a small hand holding mine.
    We walked over the water, and up through the sky.
    That's when I realized I was going to die.




    Submitted on 2006-01-23 17:55:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Woah!...im speechless. I mean what do you say to that. I dont know but ill give it a try. I know it had a scary movie type theme to it but yet a gentle, elegent, sad story typ theme as well. You can tell that this poem was not written with a pencil but more-less written with your emotions.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by SumN | [ Reply to This ]


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