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    dots Submission Name: Desperate Criesdots
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    Author: Tied2AHateSoul
    Elite Ratio:    2.92 - 7/11/6
    Words: 327
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsDesperate Criesdots
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    Out in the darkness
    Screaming but unheard,
    Embracing the deception
    No truth no recollection,
    My pain has no real word.
    Blood pours from my body
    Tears pour from my eyes,
    Love and hate,
    A twisted fate,
    Now time for me to die.
    Desperate cries to the gods above
    Desperate cries to the one I love.
    Desperate cries, to cover the lies,
    Desperate cries to conceal the fear in my eyes.
    To suffer through life,
    Is like living in hell.
    My pain I shall keep
    To myself in this deep,
    On earth where I will dwell.
    Fallen angels, beckon me
    Summoning me, unto their lair.
    Deceit and pain
    Blood pours like rain,
    Caught in a devious snare.
    Shall my soul rest
    For the first time in years?
    Or shall I cry
    Until I die,
    Drowning in my tears?
    Desperate cries to the gods above
    Desperate cries to the one I love.
    Desperate cries to find my fate
    Desperate cries of love and hate.
    No bandages to heal me
    No one to comfort thee.
    Desperate cries
    And all of the lies,
    I'm blind and cannot see.
    Trying to heal a broken heart
    Trying to save a soul in despair.
    Torment and regret
    A painful tourniquet,
    A heavy burden to bear.
    So now I die
    Forever and ceaselessly
    Wearing away
    A little each day,
    No end in sight for me.
    Desperate cries to the gods above
    Desperate cries to the one I love.
    Desperate cries, longing to expire
    Desperate cries, death I desire.
    No longer living
    No longer dead.
    An endless being
    Never seeing
    All but what's in my head.
    Twisted fate
    Dishonest deities,
    Denied of my grave
    Death's earthly slave
    Immortality decrees.
    A sickly being, I've become
    Feasting on human hearts.
    Killing the innocents,
    Cruel male violence
    Death is an evil art!
    Desperate cries to the gods above
    Desperate cries to the one I love.
    Desperate cries, to an immortal slave
    Desperate cries so I can be saved...




    Submitted on 2006-01-23 18:09:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i liked this write it was really long but thats ok it wqas still good. I liked it though to me it seemed like lyrics more than a poem anyway it goes it was a good write. Keep up the good work.

    Love, Serinity Blade
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,

    Good write. The emotion is great. I love how you repeat the words
    "Desperate cries to the gods above
    Desperate cries to the one I love.
    Desperate cries, longing to expire
    Desperate cries, death I desire."
    It's also good how each time you change the last repeated line a bit.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm speechless. It's very good, I will never be able to write something this good. You're a very good writer, keep up the good work !
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Tom110989 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really expressive poetry. Your terse lines and bedarkened tone really get accross the depth of how permeating the hatred of one's own life can be. It's bone chilling to read... but that's what it's supposed to do, and you did it right.

    -Lance
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by giventofly | [ Reply to This ]
      I am sorry you are in so much pain...you write so that I could feel the pain. Writing is a great outlet...you are being heard.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by awakeningbeauty | [ Reply to This ]



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