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    dots Submission Name: Pillzdots
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    Author: MC-Chillz
    ASL Info:    18/M/KS
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 36/35/6
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Bytes: 908



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    dotsPillzdots
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    I'm all over these pillz,
    Tired of people sayin', the shit killz,
    Shut the fuck up, gimme my refillz,
    Tryin' to kick back, poppin' for thrillz.

    Rollin' on sum ecstasy,
    The best feeling, you agree?
    I pop three, like spree,
    Goin' crazy, I guarentee.

    Fuck X, gimme a shroom,
    Let the tripping ballz resume,
    Saw sumthin' weird, across the room,
    Looked like a dude, in a costume.

    Loritab gettin' me all calmed down,
    Chugging a pile, with my crown, (royal)
    Pretty fucked up, stumbling around,
    Passed the hell out, middle of town.

    Fucked my life up, chillin in the bed.
    Shoulda paid sum thought, to what they said.
    Right now thankin God, that I'm not dead,
    permanently fucked up, in the head.




    Submitted on 2006-01-23 18:41:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was some [censored] cool [censored] man...so ur into the pills-like another commenter noted, whatever takes ya there. awesome [censored] write though...this was tight. some pretty funny imagry too...nice write, it's all cool, keep writing.
    peace
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      thats some real [censored]. like the concept or it tho, like shut the [censored] up, i do what i want. feelin it. just a little advice: i don't care, cuz i do it to, but ES poets acan tend to be sticklers wit spelling n [censored]. idk it kinda makes it look better, but if thats u, don't pay any mind to it. hollatchaboi!~P
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this [censored] was pretty funny. popping pills huh. yeah i don't mess with that stuff. but whatever gives u that high u know. for me it's music, basketball, and weight lifting. it's kinda simple though. that's the only thing i can see wrong with this one
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      as Drew said, this [censored] would sound good as hell with some music. You should try makin somethin of it sometime. Could get ya far, Peace n Love;-)

    ~*AnGeL*~
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by missing_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to tell you that I usually hate to read stuff like this (It's always better to listen to it). But I actually liked just reading this alot, even without beats. Keep it up, bro.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by giventofly | [ Reply to This ]
      hhah i found this very awesome to read man it was quite the song do you have music to put it to or do you just write to write man either way man great write hope to see more stuff from you later man
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by Psmurf_Bass | [ Reply to This ]
      ok this was off the hook. I wont to hear some with some beats. U say u got tables bust out the sounds. I bet youve tried but time to poot to use.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]


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