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    dots Submission Name: Whisperdots

    Author: Akili
    Elite Ratio:    2.36 - 915/400/60
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       No idea what this means or anything. I was playing the soundtrack from "rent" when I write it *laughs*

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I canít think of what to write
    down in ink or even blood.
    If someone ever asked of this
    I would laugh and then turn them away.

    Iíve never written something of love;
    that didnít end in tears.
    Never thought of those
    whose lives Iíve neatly stacked away.

    No oneís ever wasted
    more then a tear or two.
    Broke lives, broken hearts
    all so we can live something not a lie.

    Submitted on 2006-01-23 22:28:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great work. im not exactly sure what i was feeling, it seems mysterious all together. but it seems really really good. keep it up!

    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by deathbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      Um...what I gathered from this poem is that you've killed, or have hurt others.

    They have told themselves that they haven't brought them upon themselves,and they miss them...however little, and they continue on with this lie.


    ()_* Twisted
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm not sure what i felt when i read this. did you actually write this even when you had no inspiration? coz i do that sometimes, but mine sucks then
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think we will ever be able to live something that is not a lie, everyone one lies, I lie all the damn time.

    We still need to go see RENT, I want to SOOOOOO bad I get depressed everytime I hear a song from the soundtrack.

    I love you Aki.
    You should get a gold star for "person with most hope for the world"

    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]

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