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    dots Submission Name: Asleepdots

    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Take me…
    Take me my friend…
    Take my hand…and pull me…
    From this life, set me free…
    Carry me, through the dark…
    On your wings…. restore this heart…
    Rip me apart…show them my true colors
    Show them how much…I can bleed….
    Feed...me these lies with a silver spoon…
    Sing to me…these lies we call lullabies
    And in the night…we’ll dance along…
    To fire lit skies…false hopes running high…
    Fairies dance…while singing cryptic cants…
    Angels fly…fading into the fire lit sky…
    Devils cry…with every moment that goes by…
    We fine…this place deep in our minds…
    Casting away…all bad memories…
    I know this is a dream…never to be…
    I wake to find me…hating reality…
    Life’s always easier…when you’re asleep…

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      i like how the start luars you in it so you keep reading. like most poems you really dont get into it until the end.

    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      dream, but dont kill yourself longing for the easier life. This is an awsome poem. I'm sorry to hear that life's so hard on you. There are those of us who understand how you feel and care. If you ever need to talk, i have an open ear. m0p_man@yahoo.com
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by L0RIN | [ Reply to This ]

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