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    dots Submission Name: Still Heredots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Inspired by the events of the past week. It's not all that great, but it needed to be said...

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    dotsStill Heredots

    She's gone, and I'm still here
    Despite all you've put me through.
    Is there any question in your mind
    About who really loves you?

    She's gone, and I'm still here
    And I'm everything you could ever need
    Yet you still turn from my affection
    And yearn for the one that will leave.

    She's gone, but I'm still here
    Patiently waiting in the dark
    Until my light can shine again
    Till I take my place in your heart.

    She's gone, and I'm still here
    Maybe it's a lesson you will never learn
    I'll love you without ever holding back
    And I'll still be here when she returns.

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      Great insight into the situation! Sometimes this fact (I'm still here) gets recognized and appreciated in time; when it doesn't, a girl's gotta say "so long, good bye..." and look elsewhere for one who knows a good thing when he sees it. I'd guess I didn't need to state my personal opinion but have seen this one play out for too many. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      men can be so stupid...they're always after the women they can't have...never noticing the ones yearning and dying for their affections *sigh* stupid stupid...oh well. it's life. great poem by the way. i loved how you only rhymed a few times...not many would feel that way..but i think rhyme schemes like abababab are SO ridiculously boring and dumb. i'm not a rhyme person, so i enjoyed the few rhymes that added more flow. so you taught me that some rhyme is okay. thanks. keep it up. :P
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Meotoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah I like it...but I like everything that you write and I think that you are awesome...and I am gonna throw a beer bottle at you and some chedder cheese too ;)
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work! My toughts on this were you kinda took it way back for me. This reminds of one of my personal favortie poets Georgia Ilian shes great meaning your great. I dont know what else to say reall but great job. You are the kind of person who needs to let your poetry be known.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by SumN | [ Reply to This ]

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