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    dots Submission Name: Never Againdots
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    Author: KelseyJo
    ASL Info:    14/F/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 15/13/12
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 223
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    Bytes: 977



    Description:
       It seems I'm always feeling depressed or hopeless. It seems like I'm always doing something wrong. I'm just trying to get it all out.


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    dotsNever Againdots
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    Never again will I hope for the impossible,
    Never again will I reach for the stars.
    Never again will I try and fail,
    I will not try at all.
    Never again will I laugh and cry,
    they're both too hard and end with doom.
    Never again will I say "I love you",
    Or even declare my hate.
    Never again will I hug or kiss,
    it means you feel something and I don't.
    Never again will I have a friend,
    or try to speak like some one normal.
    Never again will I feel any pain,
    or joy.
    Never again will I let anyone get close,
    it never ends right.
    Never again will I look at anything,
    no matter how beautiful or amazing.
    Never again will I be myself,
    it hurts too much.
    Never again will I go somewhere,
    or say or do things that anyone does,
    Never again willI do anything,
    nothing at all is what I'm doing.




    Submitted on 2006-01-24 11:51:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey...
    Good flow, but kind of jaded topic. I can't really relate, but my sister Ali writes very similarly, and I give her this advice: It's good in that so many people relate, just try to get fewer clichés in there! Well done.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,

    Good write. Sometimes, expessily lately I feel that way also. It has good flow and word use.

    *Let it Flow*
    Raven
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is very good in wording and clear with the message... it saddens me though to see other people that hurt with so much of a loss of hope.. alot of times its really frusteratig because all i want to do is help some one in that situation but its hard whe they've already given up hope no hope = slim chance at getting better even when you hope and get crushed to give p hope and live hopless is almost the same as living dead... exept your still breath if just barily.. so there always room for second chances you simply just have to look for them... but hey some people call me crazy
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Breed of Wind | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, I can relate. There was I time I felt just like you. And there still are many things I can't do right. But there are still a few things I'm good at, you must have some too ? Your writing for example ! The only thing that bothers me is the ending, it doesn't feel right ... Very well done though, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Tom110989 | [ Reply to This ]



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