I got this idea from the writting promt area, I somewhat modified it though. I wrote it in a couple of points of view, not sure which one is better or if I should blend them together. I'll leave that up to you
*Let it Flow*
Raven
P.s. I warn you it's not that good.
#1 one sided
#2 one sided
#3 put together
If you were..... -------------------------------------------
If you were a lost child
Would you wish the days away
Envy the world around you
Cherish a good friend
If you were a victim
Would you tell the world your story
Belive in a place over the rainbow
If you were dieing
Would you lie in bed and wait
Let the days waste away
Hide away your soul
If you were a thought a lost cause
Would you belive the words
Let others live your life and dreams
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If you saw a lost child
Would you turn away
Pretend they weren't there
And walk away
If you saw a victim
Would you let the torture carry on
Pretend they were happy
Ignore and live your life
If you saw a dieing soul
Would you let the hide away
Lie and waste away
If you saw a lost cause
Would you pass along the thought
Make the world belive it
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If you saw a lost child
Would you turn away
Pretend they weren't there
And walk away
What if you were a lost child
Would you wish the days away
Envy the world around you
Cherish a good friend
If you saw a victim
Would you let the torture carry on
Pretend they were happy
Ignore and live your life
What if you were a victim
Would you tell the world your story
Belive in a place over the rainbow
If you saw a dieing soul
Would you let the hide away
Lie and waste away
What if you were dieing
Would you lie in bed and wait
Let the days waste away
Hide away your soul
If you saw a lost cause
Would you pass along the thought
Make the world belive it
What if you were a thought a lost cause
Would you belive the words
Let others live your life and dreams
I like how you mixed them up in the end. This poem gave me goosebumps. You definately have talent, this is the third poem I have read of yours, and it makes me sad to see that not so many people read and comment on your work. It is very good.
"If you saw a victim Would you let the torture carry on Pretend they were happy Ignore and live your life"
Sometimes it is easier to ignore others pain, so that you can ignore your own.
Or as I rather point out, you ignore there pain because you don't WANT to see that others can be worse off them you. You want to have the worst pain, the most to complain about...because people feel that is what they have to do to get noticed: Have problems.
This was sad, but it was so much more then just that.
Submission Name: If you were.....
