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    dots Submission Name: A farewell ode to happinessdots
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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA farewell ode to happinessdots
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    farewell my sweet one! may we meet,
    again beyond time's ocean deep,
    where I go, your wings gossamer-fleet
    can't follow, nor can gentle sleep.
    Farewell my sweet one! even now
    your light flies o'er the brink, and grey
    the sky without your blessed smile.
    the ocean furrows his foaming brow,
    farewell my sweet one! now no ray
    shines on many a gloomy mile.




    Submitted on 2006-01-24 15:09:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      NICELY WRITTEN. VERY UNIQUE AND TOUCHING. I'VE NEVER HEARD HAPPINESS DESCRIBED THIS WAY. KEEP THE POEMS COMING. I HONESTLY LIKED IT!
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed the structure of this one and the wording was magical. It gave me that goosebumpy feel which is always good - very unique and well read!
    Fav!
    Love,Peace,Joy& Smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good in its own way i dont think i've read anything like it before no bad intent given
    good read and good write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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