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    dots Submission Name: staring into the flamesdots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    19 Male Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 51/46/32
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 203
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 842



    Description:
       this poem is a brain child of ironicly a candle I was thinking about what to write about and I saw Jon's face in the flame so this came out of that experience .


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    While sitting down in front of the flames I started to stare into the flames and thnk of what has come to pass and what will happen
    Staring into the flames I saw my self how I looked before I turned 40
    I saw my self with you again
    I saw our flames of passion that we once had
    I saw your face , Oh how beautiful you would have looked if you would not have died at age 17
    Staring into the flames I let my mind wander and I saw all of our good times , all of our bad times
    Staring into the flames I let my mind create images from the past, present, and things to come
    this is what I see when I stare into the flames
    Oh, my love how will I ever let you go if each time that I look into the flames I see your face ?
    how will I let go of you my love ???????
    how ????????




    Submitted on 2006-01-24 19:31:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really quite sad..
    I dont know what to say...because I'm sorry is just so shallow..
    so I say to you, instead..
    learn from the hurt and channel the hurt in to other things..such as words and art and life..
    in hard times the only thing we can do is to survive them and let them teach us...

    Swanne
    | Posted on 2006-02-19 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      there's pain in those words. I know what you mean dude. MY girlfriend's parents thought i was an Aerien and kept pestering her about me and she just had enough of it. Across the road and down the lane to form a bloody cross above her hand holding a note for me that said "i love you".
    you aren't alone. I feel your pain. And i'm 15. She would be turning 15 in a week.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really cool and i love fire so this makes it pretty cool too. for some reason i really like that line:

    I saw your face , Oh how beautiful you would have looked if you would not have died at age 17

    and the write itself was pretty nice but it would be better if you fixed some of it up with the grammar and whatnot.
    nice job.

    -BleedingTears
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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