Description: Any thoughts, type them. I wish to hear your thoughts. I'm not a mind-reader.
just FYI: the darkness is symbolic. I don't want to spoon-feed the story to you, so try to figure it out.
The Teddy Bear You Gave Me -------------------------------------------
I still keep it close by
i'm 15. why?
it's the stuffed animal you gave me
it's black fur and hollow eyes, so empty
When you cut yourself
you wiped the blood on this bear
you said "i wont be here forever
but the bear will always be there"
He meant so much to you
but you gave him to me
no swapping or money.
It was free.
the bear still smells
like your perfume
the deathly scent
just like your room
i hold that bear close
like you used to do
i keep the bear because
it reminds me of you
how you walked into the shadows
without a fear, you just smile
though i wasl scared
i stayed for a while
you and i held each other there
i'm still afraid of the dark
but you gave me courage with that bear
you blackened my heart
Hallow eyes and a few stitches
here and there
blood stained and smelling like you.
I love that bear
that was gift, it was free
...i love that Teddy BEar you gave me...
I really dont know what to day. All your poems are soo sad but i keep reading them. Your a great writer and i love to read what you post. Your poems make me want to hold you and cry. Which is a good thing because usually it is very hard to grab someones emotions in a series of words. Your descriptions of the teddy bear and the way you feel makes this peice truly enchanting. Thank you for such a great peice of art. Keep it up.Always, RandiKae
I believe I am actually crying. This had Great flow, but a little disconnected at times, but it works. Thank you for enriching my life. More, please. Brian.
I don't know what to say. It's tragic and compelling. It's sad and overwhelming. It reminds me of myself. I have a teddy bear that I keep, not because someone gave it to me, but because he keeps me safe when I'm alone in my bed. It's pathetic, but I spray him with the same scent that my ex wore, and as I fall asleep, I hold him close and inhale that scent. And it keeps the nightmares away. Your story is much more compelling than this, at least your bear is personal. Mine just dreams of being so... I really enjoyed this poem.
hmm, I can't quite think of what the darkness symbolizes, but I thought this was very original. You kept me drawn into this write with every word, pulling me in. I don't have a bad thing to say about this, it was one of the best I've read so far today. I'm sorry for what you're going through. I know you don't know me, but I'm here for you.
So...is he truly the one who showed you the darkness. the one whom gave you the bear must have loved you very much...dont let his death mean nothing...
I love every word of that. It's so sad and gloomy and perfect. It seems like there's a darkness surrounding each line. There's nothing I love more than a tragic love story (though in my opinion, all love stories are or will be tragedies). I like how you described the bear and the person wiping blood on it. It just seems so real. Very beautifully done
This was fairly original and it was something that I could relate to at the same time...and I really respect that in a writer. I love how you talk about her perfume and how her stains are there and how it is silly that you keep it when you are 15 just because it reminds you of her...because I am 17 and I still do that, so very well done.
This was great. I like how the entire story is based around the bear, a symbol of the love. It's also very sad and depressing. I know I would hold onto the gift the same way, just, holding onto the memory.
This is tragic, I think, but not for the right reasons... It's tragic that the speaker gave their heart away to someone who died, and probably was taken before their time.
It's a terrible shame to spend a life dying, but the most enlightening of experiences.
yay im the 1st to comment(i think)...i love this btw.its a fave.the whole thing is like a tragic love story & im scared if its true...there was depth but i couldnt see it clearly @ first.im sry but i hav nothing bad to say about this. if u ever need someone to talk to im here because i know how it feels to lose someone close to u wether that happend to u or not. thank u 4 the awsome read..& again i truly apologies if i cant critiqe it or say anything bad about it. <!.!>
Submission Name: The Teddy Bear You Gave Me
