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    dots Submission Name: Self-Encouragementdots
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    Author: Chihuahuii
    ASL Info:    16/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 75/90/36
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       A day after finding out my mom will die in three or less months I was sent away from my immediate family to live with my godmother in Cali. I wrote this on the plane ride there.


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    dotsSelf-Encouragementdots
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    It's a wonder, there's so many things
    That bring tears to my eyes.
    Like just today I realized
    How far and high I fly with just
    A thought,
    A dream,
    A waning fantasy, how easy
    It's come to be
    A needed part of me.

    I looked up to the clouds and asked them
    Why loved ones must die
    Suddenly the Moon peeked through
    And all it said was "Trust in God" and--

    I, my
    Mother's youngest child, I
    See the clouds below me, see the
    Sunny sky, and I, thee
    Blooming rose dismantled,
    Know that what I've left behind
    Is not the million tears I've cried
    But God is sitting by her side
    So I can truly know,
    No matter where I go, I know
    That we'll be fine, and everything
    Is handled.




    Submitted on 2006-01-24 21:20:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is nevee right words to say at a time like this, so I will say I am so sorry for your loss. What a difficult time for you. This was a wonderful poem and I think it captured only a glimpes of what you must be feeling. I am sooooo sorry...

    I wrote a poem called my humble prayer for a mother who lost her daughter... you might want to take a peek... it might give you some inspiration.

    Please except my sympathy...

    IK
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
      this is truely an inspired piece. its one that you should and can completely look on as enlightenment for yourself. its not often that we face such huge things in our lives and can look at them for what they are...its between you and God and it shows that you accpet that and lay things in his hands. what a wonderful piece. very nicely done. you show considerable talent and wisdom for your age...

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      the way you write after something like this is incredible! I'm flaberghasted! When my dad died, i was unable to even write anything relating to a smile for 2 years, but you wrote this right after finding out she's gonna die... i am severely impressed.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]
      
    wow
    this is touching

    "Sunny sky, and I, thee
    Blooming rose dismantled,
    Know that what I've left behind
    Is not the million tears I've cried
    But God is sitting by her side
    So I can truly know,
    No matter where I go, I know
    That we'll be fine, and everything
    Is handled."

    its amazing how you coped with the situation
    you place such a heavy intense mood with words, and then the story flows so that you set a certain calm, or more like...everything is right. the way its supposed to be

    i admire the tone you took, and how you were able to record it in such a lovely way :]
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]
      " and I, thee
    Blooming rose dismantled"

    You have such a way with words.

    This is heartwarming and well written. I'm sorry for your pain.. but I'm glad to see that your faith in God can sustain you through such times as this.

    My own faith needs renewing. This poem was a start. Thank you for that.

    Take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]



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