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Author: Halston
ASL Info:    20/female/carlsbad,ca
Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 72 /71 /30
Words: 92
Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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Written at 14


The Sun is out
smiling on the playgrounds
pouring a cloumn of light
Through the thick glass,
Our restricting fence,
Onto my face
Giving a million dust particles life,
Reminding me of summer days

Letting the heat kiss me all over,
watching everyone laugh
tossing back their pimply heads
I don't feel that joy
I only think of the salt and sea days
The cool breeze hugging my colored skin,
The broken glass along the broken burning sidewalk
illuminated like precious jewels,
Which leads me
To think of you.

Submitted on 2006-01-24 22:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is cool because it makes you see the other side of the seasons and how beautiful the dark can be as well. There are quite a few spelling mistakes, but other than that, it looks good, kiddo!

| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]
  hm... seeing beauty as other do not see. Thinking outside the box. nice perspective.
i see that there is some meaning beneath this that is not told strait out. I will attempt to understand
| Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]

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