Jewels.

Author: Halston ASL Info:    20/female/carlsbad,ca Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 72 /71 /30 Words: 92

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Jewels.

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The Sun is out smiling on the playgrounds pouring a cloumn of light Through the thick glass, Our restricting fence, Onto my face Giving a million dust particles life, Reminding me of summer days Letting the heat kiss me all over, watching everyone laugh tossing back their pimply heads I don't feel that joy I only think of the salt and sea days The cool breeze hugging my colored skin, The broken glass along the broken burning sidewalk illuminated like precious jewels, Which leads me To think of you.

Submitted on 2006-01-24 22:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is cool because it makes you see the other side of the seasons and how beautiful the dark can be as well. There are quite a few spelling mistakes, but other than that, it looks good, kiddo! IK

| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]

hm... seeing beauty as other do not see. Thinking outside the box. nice perspective. i see that there is some meaning beneath this that is not told strait out. I will attempt to understand

| Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]

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