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    Author: Akili
    Elite Ratio:    2.36 - 915/400/60
    Words: 291
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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    Description:
       I was watching this cartoon with my little bro, then began to play children's songs. This *points to this.. thing* Is the result. Bet no one knows what song and cartoon I got the ideas from.


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    Now Mr. Dread had some problem of his own
    a nano enriched boy who annoyed him everyday.
    He tried to make the boy give up
    he hired a man to do the boy away.

    But the Max came back the very next day
    The Max came back, they all thought he was a goner
    But the Max came back, he just couldn’t stay away.

    The cyborg swore he’d kill the Max on sight
    he waited and hunted the boy around
    now the cyborg’s been locked away.

    But the Max came back the very next day
    The Max came back, they all thought he was a goner
    But the Max came back, he just couldn’t stay away.

    So Mr. Dread tried to trick the Max
    he stole one of the Max’s friends
    and used some dynamite to get rid of those two

    But the Max came back the very next day
    The Max came back, they all thought he was a goner
    But the Max came back, he just couldn’t stay away.

    Now our villains had a plant in Egypt
    that they blew up due to that Max
    when it blew they all hoped and prayed

    But the Max came back the very next day
    The Max came back, they all thought he was a goner
    But the Max came back, he just couldn’t stay away.

    Now their was another person named L'Etranger
    who also wanted the Max gone from the world
    So he threw the Max off a train and said yay

    But the Max came back the very next day
    The Max came back, they all thought he was a goner
    But the Max came back, he just couldn’t stay away.




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      duh! max steele! (my brother watches it sometimes too)

    *ahem* okay, anyways, i think it's awsome how you put this little show to poetry... makes it funnier

    i think the bad guy should read the 'Evil Overlord' list *giggles* okay, bye

    -jess
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      I take it your into anime.I think I watched a show that had this almost same run of script.I liked it.Detailed yet this is more of a story than a poem.good.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know the cartoon, but the song seems to be The Cat Came Back. I also don't know if that's the real name, but I know I've heard it.
    This is amusing, and most definitely made for wee small bairns. Or those of us with minds similar to theirs. ^_^

    ~Birdie~
    | Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by MaeBirdie | [ Reply to This ]


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