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    dots Submission Name: Lament of Orpheusdots

    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLament of Orpheusdots

    Ah! how to tune the vibrant strings
    to weep such darksome woe?
    no more will winds from Hellicon
    upon my sweet lyre blow.

    Until the very death of time
    my dirge with tears can sound,
    but still a note it could not sing
    of grief with which I'm bound.

    And yet there is no twang of lyre,
    no note as swift as smoke,
    that could attempt to catch a whisp
    of sorrow's fleeting cloak.

    Ah! what are all the beats to me
    who gather where I sing,
    and what is it to me that doves
    white lilies to me bring?

    What care I that the tiger weeps
    against nature's decree,
    and what is gained by sighing trees
    or rain flooding the sea?

    Ah! how to tune the vibrant strings
    to weep such darksome woe?
    and how to fall before such grief
    that slain, does only grow?

    Submitted on 2006-01-24 22:36:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hold on as I catch my breath and regain ground...I floated. This was absolutely astonishing, and no I'm not just saying that 'cause I'm in a good mood. I really mean this. All I can do is ask, what inspired you to right this? It was so well put together, rhymed, plotted. What more can I say just WOW! This is something so beautiful. My fav. list has an additional write... yours indeed.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      Very old-aged in my opinion. The words were almost like something out of a shakespere play. I also think it was very desriptive. I may have missed the point, but I get the feeling of music.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This, much like your others, was excellent. I could pretty much make the comments I made with the other one's on this one, but why waste the space. I think it shall do much better to show how I feel by adding it to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo, definitely going on my favorites list. Enjoyed it from start to finish. You captured a classic feel and elevated grief to a nobility. You've inspired me to work harder on my own submissions. Thank You.
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by Spare Change | [ Reply to This ]

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