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You make me special


Author: Jun_I
ASL Info:    20
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Words: 157
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is the first poetry that I write


You make me special



If there is one person in the world that can make me stand...
It's you
It there is one person that can understand how's my feeling...
it's definitely you

You make me see
You make me hear
You make me speak
You make me feel

When you are far from me
I feel nothing
Not able to speak
Not able to hear

When you are near me
I feel I can have everything in this world
Even miracles happen
For you are the miracle itself for me

You always support me
Makes me believe I can do beyond impossible things
You always understand me
You always listen to me

You give me your every affection
For me alone
You make me believe
For what is best for me

You always act
For what you think is good for me
You always makes me believe
You love me because you do




Submitted on 2006-01-25 06:57:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi and welcome to E.S! Well im sure you ahve suprised most of us already here poets. Ive been here for 3 days now and this poem is one of the best love poems ive read so far. I really hope you stick with poetry and let your skill build up too its full potential. Have fun with your poetry and you will slowly soar.
| Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by SumN | [ Reply to This ]
  Hello and Welcome to Elite Skills
I hope this site brings you all the Joy and Love it has brought me
Your poem is beautiful
You really expressed yourself perfectly in this write
I once had a best friend named Jhun who is From Baggio City Phillipines
He was a really great Friend but I guess time changes people
please if you get a free chance please take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Welcome to Elite. This poem was amazing, completely breathtaking. You wrote what was in your heart, and I can feel it when I read this.
I especially like these lines:

"You always support me
Make me believe I can do beyond possible things
You always understand me
You always listen to me"

Those few lines make me think of the better memories of me and my ex. I hope you enjoy writing as much as I do, and good luck in your writing.

~*AnGeL*~
| Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by missing_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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