This wasa nice way to descibe u with your sole mate. The story was good but the structure u need to work on for your next piece. Like the ryming structure keep the words the same like this on for instanse->
In the stillness of my mind, a seance was performed; I conjured up your spirit- found my thoughts transformed
performed rymed with trabsformed but mind doesnt ryme with spirit. Well its your writing so I guess its fine. It is hard but I think you can do it. It might take longer to try it. You might like it.
I can't just see a title like that and not read & comment! So here you go:
Awesome title. But you already knew that. I'm having trouble figuring out what this is actually about. The first two lines drew me in, but then... you lose me. I like the metaphor of a seance in one's mind, but you force it later on in the poem, with the exorcism, the trance, etc. At least from the title and the first two lines, it feels like this wants to turn into a good story-poem, i, where you're telling a story and the reader is left feeling what the emotions you want to convey. What you're currently doing, I think, is just pining for this person?
But you've definitely got a good start, whatever it is you're trying to do.
the first stanza drew my interest (having a curious title) however the middle part just threw me into oblivion.. it didn't seem to match your initial setting. and couldn't place my finger on what was going on. keep working on it though. im sure u have a good idea what you would like to portray.