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    dots Submission Name: UNITED States?dots

    Author: MC-Chillz
    ASL Info:    18/M/KS
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 36/35/6
    Words: 527
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1627
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Damn...this shit was ill. Did a collabo with Troy (Unknown) and Aknahlij_d 1 jumped in with us to make this really tiight. Leave sum comments and holla atcha boyz!!!

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    dotsUNITED States?dots


    Doin' a collabo with this dude named Troy,
    Sittin' here, just a human decoy,
    Have no idea, what he's gunna deploy,
    Comin' after you, he'll seek N destroy.
    Now I doubt, you've heard me before,
    Rappin' bout somethin', you can't ignore.
    Lets talk about the Iraq War,
    This is somethin', we should explore.
    Is Bush, In the right state of mind?
    Will this truly, help mankind?
    Thousands dead, let me remind.
    Seriously? No child left behind?!
    What about the kids that have died?
    Other kid playin' with legos inside.
    A bomb and that house collide.
    Think about it. Happens worldwide.
    Maybe the U.S. is just tragedy-prone.
    Fuck the terrorists, they'll never be atone.
    Watch the fuck out, he's in the zone,
    The one, the only, Mr. Unknown.

    (Unknown Soldier) (Troy)

    Why do we see politicians as benevolent magicians on a mission
    To use their power and position to help people in their jurisdiction
    But in reality were just casualties in a war for support
    Bush and Kerry went back forth with retorts
    Making jokes of the personal sort
    As we ignore the problems in court
    Ill admit that Bush is persistent
    Hes always a dumbass so hes pretty consistent
    How can he fail when Big Dicks his assistant?
    Bomb the White House with words
    Vicious verbs that go unheard until theyre cleaned, cooked, and served
    Hes making this country start to swerve
    I wish wed elect the good leaders we deserve
    So this country will move forward
    Pull itself out of this debt
    Wed leave Iraq
    No longer being surrounded by death
    Bashing Bush with every metaphor in my artillery
    Chilling with Bill
    2008 Ill be campaigning with Hillary

    (Aknahlij_d 1)

    sometimes, i wanna send a bomb threat to see the government'll tell us
    we sitting, twittling our thumbs, singing blues like wynton marsalis
    like face facts, if you ain't for war, you a felon
    check it, i was a felon before i wrote a rap bout bush
    it was just that the robbery in our nation gave my crime the extra push
    he's making lottery dough offa taxes and downgrading sodomy
    or at least it seems like it,
    every so often
    you see a coffin with a flag draped on it
    a confederate signal that means more wit flame on it
    you quick to lose in this american game
    lift my hand in a salute for the troops at odds
    toys for fools, to stay alive you keep faith i a death with God
    some people now and then throw fits cuz of shit going on over the pond
    and they reach for peace cuz they see that their loved ones are too far gone
    i play a violin in Iraq for enlistment
    to get them back home and clear the general vision
    the battlelines have been drawn, the skeets are shot
    the greed is white hot in this american pot
    republican plots to block off the rocks we roll
    on tape the bitch niggas trying to cop my flow
    you can't legislate a state of mind
    a grape vine to the great minds a world behind

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    ||| Comments |||
      That was so true! I'm glad somebody can say something and express what I feel too! I mean do we even know why we at war? But I love the part where you be like "Bashing Bush with every metaphor in my artillery
    Chilling with Bill
    2008 Ill be campaigning with Hillary"
    I'll be right there with my support for Hillary cuz right now Bush ain't doin [censored] to help us foreal except kill our people and my uncle happen to be over there fighting and I appreciate him trying to protect us and all but how you gonna fight when you don't even know the cause? That was hott though keep up the Flow. Good Job.

    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by nique | [ Reply to This ]
      yes I like the ending to Mc-Chills flow like this part
    Maybe the U.S. is just tragedy-prone.
    [censored] the terrorists, they'll never be atone.
    Watch the [censored] out, he's in the zone,
    The one, the only, Mr. Unknown.

    it just flows great. I real feel it.

    good job Troy but I would have to hear it with a beat.

    Ya nd the last one didnt flow to the beat thats playing at all but I would have to hear him with a beat. I would like to hear the beat that will go with this.
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      o.O good collaboration. It amde since and everything lol. Let me stop playing. It was hot. Only thing i would change is the hanging wit Troy line. Other than that it was good. keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      i must say, we had quite the flow. my [censored] was kinda fragmented and unorganized. my rhymes were off too. o well. troy was a beast as usual. u were pretty ill, but honestly, i woulda liked to see more [censored] to the point we were rappin on, not to say u weren't there, u just kinda swereved wit the introduction for troy. ill [censored] all together tho. i'd be down with another ollab anyday. hit me up, lemme know.~P
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      As much as I don't usually like rap, I think this is great. I loved the message because I am so anti-Bush as well. I just never could write about it. I think you all raised really good points and countered them well. It's good to know that not everyone on this country is an idiot supporter. It's hard to come by a democrat where I live.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the message here...this was some wicked ill [censored]! yes you guyz [censored] rock together! I must have more lol, but seriously this was some awesome stuff...u should do it more often...
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey MC, it's Angel, and obviously I got your pm. Don't worry about changing the beginning cuz it sounds like a reputable introduction. The rap itself, overall, I love it. Some issues with a few lines that I got lost on but you got the message across. I'm not usually for political pieces, but this one I can understand the questions you ask. And at the same time you kept on making me laugh. I loved these couple lines :

    Bashing Bush with every metaphor in my artillery
    Chilling with Bill
    2008 Ill be campaigning with Hillary

    This [censored] seems really good and you seem to be talented at making everything fit together pretty well. All I can say is this [censored]'s hella good n to keep it up. Peace N Love
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by missing_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the political message, and the rhymes are original. Especially liked 'artillery' with 'Hillary'..but I would probably change the beginning, about hanging with Troy. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]

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