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    dots Submission Name: Dependancydots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDependancydots
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    I was counting on you for the things that I need,
    For the love to get me through
    I'm now surrounded with wasted hours,
    All that time spent depending on you.

    I was sure you were the one I was waiting for,
    The word "naive" comes to mind.
    You'd think I'd learn, after so much heartache
    Not to depend on you another time.

    Everytime I walk away from you
    Your heartbeat pulls me right back in.
    I'm addicted to the warmth of your body.
    I'm depending on the touch of your skin.

    They don't haxe detox for people in love,
    There is no rehab for me.
    I just can't do this by myself
    I've depended on you to set me free.

    One day you'll discover that I was everything,
    I was more than you'd needed me to be.
    Then you'll turn around and find me standing here,
    At odds with my dependancy.




    Submitted on 2006-01-25 10:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awe, I liked this one.
    It was sad, yet I didn't know how he let you down. But I'm just a nosy person. It was good.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      ah, yes...dontcha hate it when someone you thought you could count on lets you down? Especially in the love and support department? Bummer, but you put such a good write together about that and the cool part was that it didnt have a hint of anger or hate to it...just sorrow and a hint of pity for the person that was too foolish to realize the gem that they once had the priviledge to hold.

    I liked the detox line too!

    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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