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    dots Submission Name: These Scars Haunt Me (Why)dots
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    Author: Pabapfc
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 111/107/66
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThese Scars Haunt Me (Why)dots
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    These scars haunt me,
    From the inside out,
    People stare at my arm
    Wondering what occured.

    I shout and scream,
    Getting this hurt out of me,
    People talk about my problem,
    Trying to make sense of me.

    My scars hurt no one,
    Just me,
    People ask about my arm,
    They want to help me.

    Why do I shut them out?
    Why do I try to stop without them?
    Why do they stare?
    Why do they care?

    My stories scare me,
    Would they shriek?
    My stories are not for the meek,
    How would the stong handle my tweak?

    Why should I accept their help?
    Why should I fear without them?
    Why do they want me?
    Why do they love me?

    I still wonder,
    As I am dying,
    I ask,
    Why?




    Submitted on 2006-01-25 14:11:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanks for the comment

    i'm so sorry you have to live in this hell, too. you shut them out and try to fix it yourself because it gives a sense of accomplishment...at least that's my excuse. i wish i could answer your "why"...i do...
    | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by imperfectxcore | [ Reply to This ]
      "I still wonder,
    As I am dying,
    I ask,
    Why?"
    That is a perfect ending to an already great poem.

    I also like the part:
    "People talk about my problem,
    Trying to make sense of me."

    In my opinion, if someone can't relate, I don't think they'll get it... not completely, anyways.
    (But of course, there is always the occasional exception.)

    If this isn't autobiographical, you did an excellent job expressing what that person was feeling. It shows that you really care (or cared- whichever) about them.

    Very beautifully done

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece alot and i think that a lot of people will be able to relate to this. kleep up the amazingly awesome work
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      you ask why because you are scared and confused you dont know what to think or do...your lost...come take my hand walk with me into the darkness there no one can see your scars...
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by True Purpose | [ Reply to This ]



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