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    dots Submission Name: failingdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 601
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1066



    Description:
       i wrote this for a guy but it turned out just a pooem for life. i hope you all like it.


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    dotsfailingdots
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    i come to a point in my life,
    wherei don't give a fuck.
    i try to end it all,
    but thats not my kind of luck.
    i'm trying so hard,
    just to find out i'm failing.
    i don't know whats wrong,
    but, now, my tears are trailing.
    i'm not sure what i did,
    but somehow i know,
    that if this continues,
    i can no longer go.
    i'm screaming inside,
    but there's none to hear.
    i wish for life but,
    but for death, they all cheer.
    i'm losing this battle,
    but i can't lose this war.
    please give ME back.
    you're what i'mlooking for.
    i'm searching the ocean ,
    and searching the sky.
    we're dying for love,
    and for love we will die.
    i'm lost in myself.
    i long for a cause.
    i'll start for a reason.
    i'll stop for a pause.
    please help me go on.
    help me succeed.
    give my life back,
    give me what i need.




    Submitted on 2006-01-25 16:27:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      thanx for your comments on rampage i am glad you like it your post was good and to the point sounds like you are down on life or love nobodies worth taken yourself down over there is alwaz a bright side to every situation
    no bad intent given
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. my favorite part was:
    i'm screaming inside,
    but there's none to hear.
    I always love when people use that in their work. Something about it just speaks to the reader.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good, I agree with pabapfc It sounded liek a sucide note, but probally wasn't it was good, will i don't know what else to say hope to here from you, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Liked it. It's about a guy right? At first it seemed like a suicide letter almost. But I don't mean to get depressing. Lol. Byes
    -Miss
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]


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