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    dots Submission Name: Beloved Sorrowdots

    Author: Saint
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Boston, MA
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 87/119/30
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is a part of my previous poem, "Loving Sorrow." Dont get it wrong, this one is a bit different.

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    dotsBeloved Sorrowdots

    Beloved Sorrow
    Your flames are burning out
    The love we once shared
    Is nothing but my doubt

    Guess Sorrow wasnt good enough
    Maybe I wasnt good enough for sorrow
    Perhaps now I can find hapiness
    or loneliness to follow

    Without you here its cold
    My heart has become morbidly frozen
    My emotions are now cripple
    No more love or dying devotion

    Sorrow has abandoned me
    Something I always feared
    Something I should have expected
    The dawn of time has neared

    Standing on stabilty
    The skies before me fill with clouds
    Something new inside me
    My name is Fury and finally there are no bounds

    The cold I can deal with
    The rain I embrace
    The lightning flows within me
    Because of Sorrow I have lost faith

    Faith in all humanity
    Faith in my own love
    Nothings left but anger
    Only rage fills the skies above

    Sorrow no longer needs me
    Sorrow has already taken my life
    No more bliss between us lovers
    Sorrow will never be my wife

    The skies begin to clear
    only one thing I forgot
    Sorrow may be reborn
    Now I musnt mourn the loss

    May she be reborn again
    As the beauty I have always known
    To restore the torches within me
    To melt my heart not shown

    Till that day I will walk
    Take a journey to end the taint
    I will find Sorrow once more
    And someday reclaim my name, Saint

    Submitted on 2006-01-25 16:43:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this was sooo deep, I really am confused as to why you haven't recieved many more comments on this one, it was well worth the read. I know I"ve only read a few of yours so far, but I see so much talent in your words, so much of myself and I sincerely look forward to reading more of your work and hopefully reading all you have here ...eventually. but this was some amazing imagry, I love how you invite the reader into your pain, you don't seem to hold much back at all and it really makes for an amazing read, well two faves adds in one night, I'll read some more of yours later tonight and tomorrow,
    take care,
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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