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    dots Submission Name: Kill Switchdots
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    Author: dax
    ASL Info:    35 male BC Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 127/127/42
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 257
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    dotsKill Switchdots
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    Programmed by my past,
    almost numb to emotion.
    Fearing rejection,
    like a searing pain.
    Deadened calm
    with cold eyes,
    to meet loves' gaze.
    Instinct raises
    my suspicious mind.
    Before feeling can penetrate
    like a hollow bullet.
    I flip the kill switch,
    to harden my concrete heart.




    Submitted on 2006-01-25 19:14:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Bwaha, I thought the same thing as Eternalshadow when I saw the title.
    Within this poem, I found several interesting lines strung together, but this was a gem:

    "Programmed by my past,
    almost numb to emotion."

    Quite intriguing, and a rather unique way of phrasing. Choice of words here presented vivid imagery, which isn't easy for a 13-line poem. Speaking of lines, this could do with a lengthening, of course... Overall, the harsh and frigid atmosphere reminded me of a switchblade, or perhaps the trigger of a previously unused gun.

    Slainte chugat,

    DW
    | Posted on 2009-03-01 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      first off, this reminded me of Killswitch Engage, which is an awesome band...ah-hem moving on lol.

    this poem is so cold and yet everyone has experienced emotions similar to that. you just cant give up and let love drag you down, which sadly most people let happen. being hurt only makes you stronger, and you still being here shows that strength. live for the moment and enjoy life, you know?

    a short yet meaningful piece.

    JD
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by xeternalshadowx | [ Reply to This ]
      the way this is writen is so cold and discrete. i feel as if this person has been hurt to many times in the past and fears love now. well thx for the read.

    brandon
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't do this. There is more and you've proved so by posting this piece. Every minute that passes is another chance for you to change your life. Things are hard, and sometimes the past moulds our future, but only we have the ability to reshape who we are.

    DeepDreamer2008

    p.s. I think you meant "love's" in line seven.
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
      One certainly feels the cold and calculated withdrawal here, and hence can imagine the pain that might have caused such a self-imposed block. I thought this was excellent,-the words are terse and succinct , and really evoke well the wary and suspicious heart.
    Well done
    Silver
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      33 huh? So much pain already? Got ya. Quite clever yet the end for me was so sad. Death at conception. Good write.
    Simone
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by c moan | [ Reply to This ]
      "Programmed by my past..." wo...nice opening line...nice lead up to the "plot," "to meet loves' gaze," and then the instinctive protector kicks in...if this is personal experience, you have described a fraction of a moment in time with writers skill. Most impressive...looking forward to the sequil, "Saved Switch," where the owner of the experience actually reprograms his/her future! LOL!
    Not bad!
    Kimmy
    | Posted on 2006-01-25 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]



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