You certainly know how to bring out your thoughts in a poem. I enjoyed this. The love you portray in this piece- unconditional. Everyone needs someone like this.. to love and be loved even through faults. I like that you are sure of his love for you as much as yours for him. I think that's great. And that last part was just wonderful.
What a vivid and well written poem. your use of imagery is one of kind to me, it reminds me of poetry of old. You write with a certain sense of class. You make your point know without being bold. I loved the last stanza. This was a delightful and rewarding read for me. It was more than I bargin for. Great job!
i thought this was a pretty enjoyable poem. i think that last stanza is brilliant, you picked all the right words and it sounds great, and makes perfect sense. i also like in that second to last stanza how you created that image or idea, that should seem really gross, but instead actually fits into the poem and doesn't totally stand out. which is good because it adds color, but the poem is still focused...i really don't have any qualms about it...very nice job.
I think this poem is very good. I enjoyed reading it and personally, I think that second to last stanza is hot stuff! Woooo Hoooo! I love the confidence that saturates this entire poem. He struggles with himself, he fights his feelings, and yet you still know he loves you and he wants you. This is very well written and expressed and I dont think I would suggest changing anything here. Men are just a big pain in the ass sometimes, and we as women just have to put up with it I guess...haha! Excellent poem! Take care.
Oh, I like this very much. I love the part about you standing in his shadow and holding his demons. Now that is a line. And also the part about being the vivid dream he struggled with that left a wet stain on his sheets...that is so disgusting, yet perfectly put that it makes me jealous that i didn't come up with it. Thank you for writing this!
Hmmmm...I don't know if I liked the second to last section much, a bit too descriptive...O.o.
But it's good. I like the idea and the way that you took feelings from childhood and placed them into the years now. It seems like this guy has trouble realizing that he loves you, and has a hard time getting it through to himself. Well done!