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Submission Name: Unnoticed dots

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Author:	StevenJay
ASL Info:	21, Male, Chicago
Elite Ratio:	3.41 - 27/36/14
Words:	118

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	157
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	755

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Unnoticed dots

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Does the rain pour,
Gently weeping,
Dropping from the willows leaves
So it can form pools for the children to play in,
Or does it fall
Kissing the faces of angles
To produce the beauty of a rainbow,
Does the rain fall from heaven?
Is the fog there to mask the beauty of raindrops?
Hidden behind a cloak lye the tiny diamonds
Stuck to the blades of grass that dance within the wind,
Beauty is unveiled by the sun
As everything shimmers
Awake to start a new,
Does the rain pour,
Gently weeping
Used to wash away our yesterdays,
Or does it fall
Playing a song against the windowsill
To sound the beginning of today.

Submitted on 2006-01-26 12:07:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is beautiful, i really liked it. my favorite line was probably :

Is the fog there to mask the beauty of raindrops?

but what i didnt like is how the title kinda didnt match but then again i see how it did. to me this seems like something i would have left untitled or something about beauty because you happen to mention that alot through out the poem.
but this was actually very well written and beautiful, im glad i took the time to read it.

-BleedingTears
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  I love nature poems and this was a very fresh piece. I thought by the title it would be someone needing an uplift but I've gotten one instead!
I liked the end too!
Lots of beauty goes unnoticed not because "IT" isn't there but because we don't take time to see "IT".
Very nicely done!
Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
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| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is going on my favorites list. I love the way you explained nature in this write. Detailing something as small as the rain.

Does the rain fall from heaven?
Is the fog there to mask the beauty of raindrops?
Hidden behind a cloak lye the tiny diamonds
Stuck to the blades of grass that dance within the wind,
Beauty is unveiled by the sun
As everything shimmers
Awake to start a new,
Does the rain pour,
Gently weeping
Used to wash away our yesterdays,
Or does it fall
Playing a song against the windowsill
To sound the beginning of today.

I loved from the middle on. Keep this awesome material flowing from your heart and soul my friend. The picture you paint with words can only be seen by the minds eye, correct?
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by nasuka | [ Reply to This ]
  awe man i love this poem... i m speechless... its really really great writing. you have talent man...

Does the rain pour,
Gently weeping
Used to wash away our yesterdays,
Or does it fall
Playing a song against the windowsill
To sound the beginning of today.

i loved this part. u have just made me realise i need to look at life a little differently. thank you. keep writing...

karen
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]

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