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Author:	Raindrops
ASL Info:	25/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:	2.48 - 184/213/288
Words:	381

Class/Type:	Poetry/Religious
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This may have been written in 2001. It doesn't rhyme. It all just came flooding out.

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Am I blind to what you see?
You tell me what I'm doing
I just don't see it; understand
I'm just confused today, who am I?
You say I'm treating people like dirt
and I don't see it. I must be blind.
Lord open my eyes to my actions
I don't want to make people feel rejected
Like a disappointment like me.
It was all good
and today it all came crashing down on top of me.
I was rejected and disappointed
A disappointment to people.

My heart is full of sorrow.
Oh Lord, I need your joy and peace
Open my eyes to what I need, I do not see.
I want to go back, but yet, I need to stay
where you put me; to be contented.
Growing in You is what I need
I feel like a failure, although I know I'm not.
Open my eyes Lord Jesus
I need to see.
It's not right, my life, I know, but I'm striving..really I am.
The weather is so cold and me too it seems.
I long for the warmth and won't get it till my eyes are open.
Oh Lord, hear my fervent prayer
Open my eyes to what I'm not seeing, help me.

I don't know what to do from here
The devil is distracting me with my friends, the guy I like, my family, and yet I still hold
to you.
I may fall, but you catch me.
Thanking you for that.
But I need more.
Tears of sorrow and misunderstanding fall from my eyes and I wonder what's happening
in my life
Maybe a big change; a turn-around
"Will all this strengthen me?" is what I ask
I'm going through a storm; a tunnel and
not halfway through, but there is a light
at the end I must make it to.
So my plea, oh Lord, is for you to open my eyes so I can move on.

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  This is a wonderful write. So full of deep and sincere emotions. I can tell you really poured your heart into this prayer. Your faith is wonderful as well. We all need to hang onto our faith for strength and ask for help and guidance when we need it. I know, I have had some really tough times in my life as well and sometimes just a prayer made me feel a little bit better. Sometimes praying seems like the only thing you can do in some situations and your faith is what carries you through and makes you stronger. I think this is very nicely written and expressed. You did a nice job with this one. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  WELL I SEE NOTHING WRONG WITH THIS ONE AT ALL BECAUSE IT CAME FROM YOUR HEART. AND SOMETIMES IT DOESN'T NEED TO RHYME OR BE PERFECTLY STRUCTURED TO MAKE A POINT. I HAVE FELT EXACTLY LIKE THIS MANY TIMES AND YOU DESCRIBED IT VERY WELL. GREATTT PIECE!
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
  lines were going all over the place here! I swear one jumped out of the screen and knocked over my coffee!

ok I called on the rabid team of carpenters and they are not union either!

*hacking, sawing, cutting, thumping, clinging, banging, shouting, and cursing*

~~~
Am I blind to what you see?
You tell me what I'm doing
I just don't see it; understand
I'm just confused today, who am I?
You say I'm treating people like dirt
and I don't see it. I must be blind.
Lord open my eyes to my actions
I do want to have them feel rejected
Like the disappointment of me.

It was all good today
then it all came crashing,
down on top of me.
I was rejected and disappointed
A disappointment to people.

My heart is full of sorrow.
Oh Lord, I need your joy and peace
Open my eyes to what I need, I do not see.
I want to go back, but yet, I need to stay
where you put me; to be contented.

Growing in you is what I need
I feel like a failure,
although I know I'm not.
Open my eyes Lord Jesus

I need to see.

It's not right, my life, I know,
but I'm striving.. really I am.
The weather is so cold
like my soul is chilled
I long for the warmth,
and won't get it till my eyes are open.

Oh Lord, hear my fervent prayer
Open my eyes to what I'm not seeing, help me.

I don't know what to do from here
The cursed devil is distracting me,
with my friends, the guy I like, and my family

yet I still hold on to you

I may fall, but you always catch me.
Thanking so much you for that.
But my Lord I need more.
Tears flood with sorrow
and misunderstanding,
fall far from my eyes
and I often wonder
what's happening
in this life

Maybe a big change; a turn-around
"Will all this strengthen me?" is what I ask
I'm going through a storm; a tunnel and
not halfway through, but there is a light
at the end I must make it to.
So my plea, oh Lord!

it is for you to open my eyes
so I can move on.
~~~

walla ok, ok I am no Michelangelo but it think it looks less like a Picasso wouldn’t you agree? now as far as the message it is lovely and committed. A cry out to God should always be heard and answered. The feelings are very strong in this searching piece. From a lost soul to you may God hear you in the worst of times and give you comfort, take care,

~mike
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
  First of all, rhyming isn't what makes a poem. To me, it's about the raw emotion and how you put it out there. As I've said, you have the honesty and you dig deep into your thoughts and emotions. It's just a matter of making it flow a little bit more, by eliminating unnecessary words and using phrases that aren't cliché. It's not always the easiest thing to do, trust me-you've read my work, I do know how difficult it is. I enjoy reading your work for the fact that you are very open and honest about the inner conflicts that you have and for the fact that there is always a light at the end of the tunnel for you. That's awesome and something that I hope that other people see, that things aren't always completely hopeless. I'm a firm believer that people make their own happiness, it just depends on them and how they go about it. You do a wonderful job of laying that out for people and hopefully someone will follow your lead and find that same happiness.
Keep it up!

Candi
| Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  I think any prayer is well received and genuine. It's not easy sometimes and that you look for strength you don't have the Lord gives it to you.
Thanks for sharing this - I felt like this the past couple of days - like I just sometimes am not getting something or like you said, being a disappointment.
Keep praying!
Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
tif
| Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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