Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Wanting to Forgetdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: submarine
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 128/91/45
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 2400
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 628



    Description:
       feel free to give me feedback.....


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWanting to Forgetdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I want to forget your lips,
    The way u kissed,
    The way you held my hand,
    The way you make me feel.
    I want to forget your eyes
    And the sparkle in them,
    The way you used to look at me,
    The way you sometimes,still do.
    I want to forget us,
    And every dream we had,
    Of being together in love,
    Forever and ever.
    I want to forget you,
    And all you said,
    All the promises and lies,
    Of love and life.
    I want to forget myself,
    And how much i love you,
    How i know deep inside,
    I can never actually forget you.




    Submitted on 2006-01-26 13:02:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This is a good write and Im sure anyone who has loved and lost could easily relate. the poem has good flow even if it dont rhyme. But I also agree with Epiphany That lost love is about remebering the good, learning from the bad, and moving on to find something better. I hope you find your way.
    | Posted on 2006-02-03 00:00:00 | by Alura | [ Reply to This ]
      i go through this everyday and id say its been over a year but once you find love and then you lose it you search for it everywhere and you no that life isnt as satisfy'n if your alone so it just makes matters worse, i tell myself ill forget his name all the time but like always it creeps back into my mind. i dont think ive seen him in over a year and that helps but the fact that he wants to be good friends kills me bcuz everytime we talk i fall back in love again and get hurt all over again.
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I widh love was as easy to forget...awesome work...I've always found that writing was the best way to vent frustrations, other than hitting something :)...

    mike
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by encognyto | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this alot and i know that a lot of people will be able to relate ot this. i know i did. i like it a lot and i hope to read more by you soon. keep up the amazingly awesome work.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      True love(s) aren't quickly forgotten - it's not so much a question, I believe, of forgetting as it is remembering the good & learning whatever lesson from the demise of the relationship.
    This was good - to get it out. Good luck!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      everyday i wish i could forget most of these things. awesome way of describing it. i dont know about you, but my writing always comes out best when i really care about the things i'm writing about. i think thats what happened here, but i could be wrong.
    | Posted on 2006-01-26 00:00:00 | by jen531 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    88948

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry