Nice...very nice. It was a mysterious piece at first but after reading it again I got the understanding. You are talking to someone. Seems like your lover or someone you desire to love. One mispelled word. Breth should be "breath". I make mistakes too. Smile lady...smile. You're not perfect. Just perfected by your corrections. This stanza really stands out:
i see that smile trying to shine through its so simple to see you cant hide what your about to do i will let you be
That stanza makes me wonder if there is more to come. It is an eye catcher that keeps things interesting.