Description: This is something I started writing while watching her stand at the library counter... so everything in here is true... and it's incomplete, too- I need quiet a bit of time to finish it... Sorry for the first typos... forgot to check before submitting!!!
I just sat looking,
As you stood there
With your back to me, face turned away
So all I could see was your beautiful hair.
When I am with you you pretend
As if you never did or ever will care;
When I am with you I feel my heart swell up inside,
Even though with you my heart and mind truly reside.
I am unable to tell you how I feel,
Hoping you would realise soon and accept me,
Hoping my heart will finally start to heal
Because you are the one who is breaking it continuously
Without even realising it yourself...
nice way to put ur emotions while watching....her! "Because you are the one who is breaking it continuously Without even realising it yourself..." -i thought those were the best lines in the poem... all i can think of saying before ending this critique is..."TRUE, TRUE!"---the shawty way haha
Oh, the love that is never realized... I hate that crap! The deep dark crush that consumes you in the night when all you can think of is the scent of her hair and the softness of her skin... whoa buddy, I feel for you!