Your words are beautiful, and the simplest plans always work best anyway. You deserve... um... Well, I don't have what good things you deserve, but I do have... um... lint. Sorry. It's great, but I'm poor.
WHY ARE YOU SO GOOD! I'm beginning to plot on how to completely steal your talent. The only suggestions I can make is that it was a bit hard to understand exactly what is happening. Other than that, I think it is a great peice, and I would add it to my favorites if I knew how...
Woah! I like it when you rhyme! Hee-hee! You do it so well and this was a very nice tale. I really thought the last two lines in the first stanza were marvelous. Great stuff maynard and thanks for sharing!
Perfect Thou you said you do not usually write in the rhyme scheme you wrote this write very well I can feel the love you and your soulmate share I pray you both live a beautiful life together God Bless Ron